One of Those Stories

Story written by Natasha on Monday 18, February %4

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I met him one summer, it was an odd way since most people don't meet this way. We became real good friends. Was a pretty strange friendship at first but then everything got a lot stranger when our friendship became a bigger word... a relationship. It all seemed ok, and we were both real happy. We'd try to find time to talk. Every chance we had we took a straight grab for it. Days, months, even close to years went by. We both got older and found more responsibilities to do and yet we still managed to talk to each other a few times a day. Of course with more time, these "times a day" became a few short moments a week. It was ok and all. I mean, the more time apart the more we grew closer every time we'd see each other. But then problems ran around our corners. I know all relationships have problems or else they wouldn't be normal right? But these problems became harder to deal with since one of which would change our lives forever. You see, this problem would tear us apart and keep us from each other. You're probably thinking, "why not solve the problem and make things better?" Well you see, it isn't one of those problems where you can say a word and make it disappear. It's much more complicated than that. I'm afraid there isn't any way out of this one. I can only hope now that all will turn out ok. I love him with all my heart. He's my world, my spirit, my everything. His name has been in my mind ever since we've said our, "I love You's" Ever since that day I've tried to see clearer into what i look at. You, Me, TOGETHER is how it should be. We've been wanting to be with each other so badly. All I feel is the "need" the "want" the "feeling" to be with him. It sounds simple but yet it's so difficult to bring it to reality. We've come so close but our luck seemed to bring us round and round in some sort of never ending circle. I don't see why we can't just be together and forget everything else. Things just seem to keep getting in the way, parents, school, distances and much more. I want to be able to hold him in my arms, go watch a scary movie while cuddling with him... This might all sounds pretty weird but it's just the way I feel. All that you've just read are words that mean so much to me. They're a big part of my life. Thoughts, Feelings... Everything! I guess you could say he is my life. I'll keep hoping and will keep waiting for the time when we'll be together. I know when that day comes... It'll be one we'll never forget

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