Poem written by Kissing_Fool on Monday 18, February %5

Member Avatar
This writing has not yet had a description added.

Overall Rating: 84.333333333333%

This writing has been rated by 3 members, resulting in a rating of 84.333333333333% overall. Below is a breakdown of these results:

Spelling & Grammar:91.666666666667%
I feel like am alone. Nay, it is a wake up call, so pick up the fucking phone. I want to see, rather I want to be shown, this gunman isn?t lone. And with no direction home. How dry I am, dry to the bone. This is not to delay, or postpone. Sinking in depressions black ocean like a stone. Exactly what was this penalty? Did I forget to pay some fee? What was wrong with my cup of tea? What in the world could it be? I have so much love left in me. Yet I drown in this empty sea. I?m too nice a guy you see. And I should be scattered to the wind like so much debris

Rate This Submission

Please take the time to rate this writing once you have read it. Our ratings system allows people to know both how popular the writing is, and how well the general populous of the site thinks it is written. This also allows the writer to have feedback about their writing, so they know if they need to improve their technique, or if they're on the right track.

The system allows you to vote on several aspects on the writing. Refer to the help text below each aspect for an explanation. Consider the different aspects carefully, and submit your vote using this form. It will be instantly weighted with the other votes given.

Depending on the writing type, give your opinion on the overall plot if it is a story, or the concept of the writing if it is abstract such as a poem. Does it seem to make sense, strike a chord with you or seem a well chosen concept? Did the author stick to the concept or did they change mid-thought?
Did the author use words and descriptions that allowed you to visualize the scenes portrayed in the writing? Did the feelings of the work stir your emotions as you read it?
Were the words spelled correctly? Was proper punctuation and grammar used? Could you easily understand sentences or did you have to re-read lines several times to understand what was meant?
Depending on the writing type, how did the writing flow? If it's a story, did it have a smooth, easy to follow flow? Did the flow of events make sense? If it's poetry, did the author stick with the syllable flow for that writing type? Did the lines rhyme properly if a rhyming device was used?
Did the author use the same words over and over or did they use a broad vocabulary to get their exact point across? Could better wording be chosen then what they have used?


Leave a Comment

Please Login to Post a Comment.
  • I actually enjoyed this. Clever. Unpredictable.
    Worth a 2nd read.

    Thanks for sharing.
    - November 16 2017 03:04:55
    • Sometimes love is about building and rebuilding upon the ruins of the current or previous inhabitants of your heart, enigma explained. Well portrayed; bravo!
      - December 05 2019 05:29:20