Torn to Nothing

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the first poem I had written in about 8 months. Dont rateThis writing has been rated by 1 members, resulting in a rating of 90% overall. Below is a breakdown of these results: | |
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Used in this demanding world,
torn from these dead memories,
my heart barely beats,
My body barely breathes.
All of this was torn to nothing,
but I have to make it something,
with the heart that barely sings,
with the life that barely thinks for itself.
However can I hold on,
however can I hold on,
to something that doesn't,
hold on to me?
This empty house, it feels so wrong,
like the voice without the song,
like the memories that are forgotten,
torn and shattered in my mind...(forgotten, forgotten)
Missing your love is not a deadly sin,
but this battle I know I can't win,
this god has forsaken me,
this heart you've stole from me
has been beaten and bruised,
all thanks to you (beaten and bruised, all thanks to you)
However can I hold on,
however can I hold on,
to something that doesn't,
hold on to me? (hold on to me)
excellent
-Nicole