Hi Alex

I did originally have this as a larger chapter but my aunts and uncles who i have been using to proof read kept telling me that it was 2 big a chapter for people to bother reading now and days, ill put it up as i originally had it let me know what you think.

also thank you i know it can be hard to be polite when offering criticism, I think you do a great job since i hear what your saying and don't feel hurt by it which is a great skill.

Thanks for the comments, Denizens. Mike, yes, Kurt V. is considered a Sci-Fi writer by anyone that matters. He even accepted the label when it implied one was little more than a scribbler on restroom walls. And if I have in any way guided you on the path back to Sci-Fi, then my work is done. (Which doesn't mean I will stop, however.)

Well, Bill, this doesn't seem to add much to your story -- certainly not enough to be a chapter. It is full of mistakes that I'm sure you could find if you tried. Using the Den as a proofreading service deprives you of a valuable resource. Still hoping for more of the story.

Welcome, Bill. This is an excellent beginning as to concept; syntax, not so much. Remember I use and comment based on S.E. (Simplified English: per Routh the language of the US and, strangely, Israel; you probably use P.E. (Primitive English, my term for that of the UK, CAN, & AUS. Beyond your love of the useless "u" many other usage differences exist, especially in punctuation.

'I like it I go to work.' needs something (punctuation, maybe) between "it" & "I go"
'One week ago. Everything changed...' 1st part is not a sentence; s/b connected to 2nd part
'She is dressed...' switch from past to present awkward here
'... some sort of markings painted into it that glows.' "it" to "them" & "glow" (plural subject)
'For 3 nights...' spell out numbers at least up to ten, usually higher
“Shit - what an asshole.... talk to me like that.["]
'... she acts like [a] spoiled princess...'
'... faster then the eye can follow.' "than" not "then"
'With a sucking sound as the blade... bone.' not sentence as written: replace "as" with comma

Problems with quotes: Direct quotations from different speakers should almost always be in separate paragraphs. Any opening quote " should have a closing quote. Usually thoughts use '...' when spoken quotes use "..." and vice-versa, or sometimes thoughts are underlined.
Pick a tense (past is easier) and stick to it, at least for the entire scene; switching is disruptive.
Several places where "sentence" is not really a sentence, sometimes due to superfluous word.
Repeating a word can make a story tedious: use alternatives for diversity:
scream(ing) -- yell, call; my dream -- my fantasy, (after stabbing) my nightmare
I'm a fan of perky (& less perky) breasts, but unless they contribute to the story don't see the point.
The same with spanking a tiny woman. A piece of advice: never even contemplate spanking anyone until being positive shem isn't packing a sword.

You need to edit carefully before posting, so that the comments you receive will be more helpful rather than point out things you could find yourself. I find that putting a writing aside for a few days before proofing helps me spot errors; find out what works for you.
Waiting for the next chapter. Ooops, just remembered it's already here. Write on.

Thanks for the comment, Bill. The reason for the description was that it's really not sci-fi but I didn't want to give that away to soon. Puzzled by bit about your editor & comment boxes.

it's very well written flows well, and i truly felt bad for Karl when he realizes he is an actor. For some reason the description is about a scifi story rather then being a short story, and if this was chapter 1 and didn't include "The End" i could really see this going somewhere as scifi.

But seriously well written.

~sorry my editor told me they will not do comment boxes

This rant proves one, and only one thing. You're human. Shocked about that?

I get a sense that there is some strong emotion tied to this. A feeling of mother's comfort during a very, very harsh childhood experience? Am I close?

I love the last stanza. And yes, you are right. There are infinite possibilities in the building of a poem.

lol I don't doubt Ringo has seen some grilled octopus in his time.

I also think a little bit of chemical influence went into the composition of the song.

You may be over thirty, but you still have a lot of living to do. Don't beat up on yourself too much, it can clog your brain and drag you down.

Wouldn't be free anymore, would it?

Your comments are forever appreciated, Kt. No need for forgiveness. The core of the poem is based on Seamus Heany's From the Land of the Unspoken. Here you may find the bit I've used, beginning with "Our unspoken assumption..." :

https://books.google.com.ly/books?id=dWhdq5AKVpYC&pg=PR6&lpg=PR6&dq=our+unspoken+assumption+has+the+force+of+revelation...+our+language..+seamus+heaney&source=bl&ots=7prEmDPluT&sig=ybHEIqugZrDacWE7n-GVKVjZCL4&hl=en&sa=X&ved=2ahUKEwjOvbfNiqndAhVMC8AKHdhgA4kQ6AEwAnoECAgQAQ#v=onepage&q=our%20unspoken%20assumption%20has%20the%20force%20of%20revelation...%20our%20language..%20seamus%20heaney&f=false

the line : My mind goes on wondering why God hasn't this stopped

I'm unsure if there should be quotations around that phrase. Does poetic license often omit that punctuation? or does a comma and question mark suffice to correct phrasing?

Otherwise, it was a fairly easy read. Thanks for sharing.

A great free-form rant. A really good piece of free writing. Excellent!

But I would have gone back, done a quickie edit, and but some paragraphs in.!

Some things change. And some things don't really change at all.

Interesting thought here. I am not familiar with the part of Islamic culture you seem to be pointing to, so forgive me if I pass on this one.

You got quite a bit of imagery in this short verse. Good job.

A bit short and, it seems, unfinished.

This is very nice. It is well-written. It has a very bittersweet feel to it. It seems as if you include both the good and the bad.

Nice job.

Very nice. A little harsh and rough towards the end, but you bring the point home. In fact, you kind of ram it home.

Noted.

The word to me connotes the "alchemy" of poetry. It also has got something to do with translation.

I'd never break my promise.

Very.

Here, Kt.:
https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Harissa

Well, perhaps they represented your midlife crisis.

Welcome, PCSO. A well imaged, bittersweet reminiscence of a past love. I presume you are not a native English speaker and/or write in other than USA English, so some comments may not apply.
'The day we become a couple.' clause not sentence: "The" to "That" or join to previous
The 1st 4 "sentences" of the next para also aren't sentences. Occasionally a fragment can work, especially in dialog, but very seldom a string of them & not here. many, many places
'There is one thing I do remember (tough)[though].'
'... how much did holding hands with her meant to me.' omit "did"

To make reading easier, you should indent the first word of each paragraph and/or leave a blank line between paragraphs. Sometimes the site deletes initial indents, in which case double space between paragraphs. Check the 'Read" version after you post: that's what others will see and sometimes it differs from what you see when you submit or edit. This has been improved by recent mods to the site software, but can still cause problems at times. Write on.

No. I thought that's how a mourning father might feel. His statements could be unfinished and inconsistent.

Thank you both for your feedback. I'll make the necessary edits.

Hmm. Interesting.

Love your poem, just need to put punctuation marks where needed and to should be written as too, meaning also. Again nice

very nicely done Don't forget to capitalize that's all other than that I really enjoyed your poem, we'll done.

Admit I'm not sci-fi fan (although read Vonnegut aeons ago--is he considered a writer of sci-fi?) but your story was intriguing and written with clever wit. Thoroughly enjoyed from opening sentence. Might get me reading the genre again!!

Never!

Let's drink to Islamic Culture writings, then!

Naaah.

Kt., your notes are always duly noted.

I think it could be both, but then a rant should convey real emotions. This was a play on certain things.

Nicely done.

Lol! The simple, old-fashioned bow still works best.

Oh, I might try slip-on/slip-off. It seems to fit a bit better.

"Transmute?" Perhaps "transfer" might work better here. Just a suggestion.

lol. Nicely done, and in eleven lines, no less!

Interesting perspective. You paint an excellent picture of despair.

I most sincerely hope that it is not autobiographical.

I liked this. It is very sad, and paints a tragic picture of the results of bullying and harassment. Nice writing.

Very good! Excellent ending!

"I recalled papa telling us about reports from an underground resistance fighter he had made contact with." - You should not end a sentence with a preposition. Try "I recalled papa telling us about reports from an underground resistance fighter with which he had made contact."

One caveat: This is very long. It could easily be broken into two, and possibly three, chapters. You may want to consider that.

That said, the chapter is very well written. The imagery is superb. You paint a very vivid picture of the craziness that infected the Nazis. Good job.

lol One question. Exactly what is "infraspinatus"?

Forum: General Discussion

Last post on thread was by Routh:

With the recent post flood that the site saw, I was made aware of some incorrect expectations of what specific pages are intended to be used for, and reminded of some of the issues on this version of the site.

Firstly, the intended place to see the latest posts is the 'Latest Activity Feed', now featured with the link 'Latest Activity' in the main menu to clarify it's use. This view shows the latest 50 posts or more, and will concatenate multiple posts by one user to a single entry. This is the best and only place you should be using to 'catch up' from your last visit.

The 'Newest' page in the Writings Archive (now renamed to Library) has been renamed to 'Newest to Oldest'. This page is a chronological archive view for searching through all posts by date, and it is not intended for users to use to catch up on posts. As such, post concatenation will never be used here. Not to mention that post concatenation is largely incompatible with pagination, and to try and do both cleanly and without error would make for a very slow page.

Now, on the topic of the post flood, which has been discussed before here. The new version of the site will introduce the Karma system, which will be a point based system that will give users points for commenting, posting forum posts and rating writings, and deduct points for posting writings. New users will start with enough points for 2 posts, and old users will earn a score based on their history. This is intended to solve the biggest issue The Den faces in the 'social' era of the Internet, where users have become rather anti-social and post content expecting comments without participating on the site by doing so themselves. To be clear though, if a user has enough posts to post 30 writings at once, the Karma system will not prevent this, and never will. This will be handled via post concatenation in the feeds, which will prevent other users posts from being pushed off the feeds by mass posting. The Library pages however will never concatenate posts.

Version 5 will also introduce the concept of 'following' a writer. So if you want to ensure you never miss posts by your favourite writers, you will be able to follow them and you will have a dedicated 'following' feed to just these users posts and activity.

Forum: Announcements

Last post on thread was by Routh:

Update:

I stand corrected, gender was part of v4 and not v3, and v3 did allow me to remove birthdate. So that field and all it's data have been removed from user profiles and the database.

Forum: Help and Support

Last post on thread was by Fictitiously imaginative:

Hey.....just joined the site......cud u pls help me find the 'Submit Writing' option...... can't really find it

Forum: General Discussion

Last post on thread was by Loothier:

About ten, maybe even fifteen years ago, when the Internet was still young, I chanced upon an amateur author's website. I spent many nights reading his stories about the ever-diminishing possibilities of science caused by more-dimensional beings squeezed into our world, and the immortal lady (created accidentally in some scientific experiment) struggling to keep the human race alive through the eons, storing knowledge in the roughest form possible as the universe kept loosing detail. Another story was about superheroes that got exponentially more powerful, and more deranged, each time a new one was turned, and the previous people who tried to stop the next ones. Around the tragic time I lost the bookmark, he was writing about magic (which worked like programming with math inside the mind) used to engineer some parts in a space shuttle that exploded. His website had yellow text on a dark gray blue background, if I remember correctly. He did occasional rant posts on science and programming subjects too.

I would very much like to read those stories again. Does someone on this forum know the author or his website? Or a better place to ask?

Forum: The Editor's Desk

Last post on thread was by chancematthews01:

I am a new amateur writer. I have book one already posted. I would really like help with editing. Do a Search for "Chi Warrior Saga - Book 1"

Forum: General Discussion

Last post on thread was by Phillip Cain:

Hello all. Subject is pretty straight forward. I have been considering a switch in majors at my local community college into creative writing or something close to it (not even fully aware of my options yet to be honest), but I would like to know how it happened for you. Was it an epiphany moment, something you fell into, or something that was always present in you.

edit: it really labels me an ink virgin lol, what a knee slapper

Forum: General Discussion

Last post on thread was by Rob Kosy:

Now that's a proper critique and hard, fair and good advice.

The one draw back for me about E-books, Kindle & such is that 'anyone' can publish. For example there's a guy who puts out fabulous, professional covers and calls himself Stephen King. The type face is even similar, very much similar, in-fact. But he is not the Stephen King. a fact that is painfully evident once you start suffering......I mean reading.

There are also some excellent stories and ideas but the writing is not to the standard you would expect.

Forum: Help and Support

Last post on thread was by ChristianDudette:

Hi, Could someone manually do my avatar too? It doesn't seem to be loading either. Thanks.

Forum: Help and Support

Last post on thread was by Kore-rupt Kay-os:

How do I post my writing?

Forum: Help and Support

Last post on thread was by Nurwanti:

I also have the same question, thanks for asking

Forum: Songwriter's Studio

Last post on thread was by Nurwanti:

lol worth to try

Forum: Bug Reports and Site Issues

Last post on thread was by Routh:

This should not be an issue anymore.

Forum: General Discussion

Last post on thread was by Routh:

This short post has some quick and easy ways to improve your writing.

https://medium.com/an-idea-for-you/the-two-minutes-it-takes-to-read-this-will-improve-your-writing-forever-82a7d01441d1#.vr45txmxo

Forum: Off Topics

Last post on thread was by SirSludge:

It's been years and now it's back
we got the counting in the sack

Now in this fort
there is a court
but you do not sue
because it's 22!
.
.
.
No, that's not right!
The numbers aren't tight
I don't want to be a bore,
but I tell you, it's 54!

Forum: General Discussion

Last post on thread was by Don Roble:

Forget original. The last original idea was Jules Verne.

Write what you want. Write it as well as you can. If you post it, someone will read and comment. It sometimes takes a week or so. You will get the unvarnished truth. There's certain rules that never change in writing. Opinions as to the story or whatever you write is just an opinion. Never, never take it personally. Personal stuff will be deleted.

Forum: General Discussion

Last post on thread was by Don Roble:

If the narrator is unable to hear it you can't tell it. Write the one side to be obvious in what is being said.

"You were hit by a rock?"
"Twenty-two stitches! Wow!"

Forum: General Discussion

Last post on thread was by Don Roble:

I don't know where to start answering this question.

Look around the net for basic writing. That's a start.

I would skip that and write. The primary thing is to tell a story. Don't try to tell it like anyone but yourself. Don't rush things. Writing takes time. read your own words as you start each writing session. Keep the pace even.

Check your spelling. Check your grammar. Read it out loud. Does it sound right?

Don't look too far ahead unless you have an outline of what you want to achieve.

There are other things to do but this is a start.

Forum: General Discussion

Last post on thread was by trubolotta:

Just a few suggestions from someone who has done a lot of technical writing but now wants to do SciFi writing.

1. 1. Set up a crib sheet of people (or entities), places and things with descriptions to help you be consistent throughout the story. You don't have to reveal all detail at one time, but being consistent over a period of time helps readers.
2. 2. I write a plot outline and sometimes three, four or five. Some interconnect, some do not. Some I dump and some I polish. It doesn't take long and can be very generalized using your own brand of shorthand.
3. 3. Work your chapters. I'll rewrite, chop and mince a chapter as much as necessary until it reads and fits the way I want it to read and fit. I've even scrapped entire chapters, salvaging only a few good parts and dropping the rest.
4. 4. Ideas sheet - its a document I always keep to paste in ideas I think were good but just in the wrong place in the story.
5. 5. Finally, don't take my word for it. I'm brand new at fiction writing and I'm sure more experienced writers can give you good advice.

Forum: General Discussion

Last post on thread was by Routh:

I will hopefully have this implemented before too long along with a new version of the site. It's currently a work in progress, about halfway done.

Forum: General Discussion

Last post on thread was by flickeringfairy:

There have been some in the past and some that dabble in a little bit of everything.

Forum: General Discussion

Last post on thread was by Demonic:

I'd love to check it out. I'm kind of in the same boat as you, writing a story but don't have all of it worked out yet. I'll have to check out chapter one.

Forum: General Discussion

Last post on thread was by Kholm:

I read once that military folk are somewhere around 90% more likely to smoke then non military. Now don't mistake that for 90% of military people smoke, but there are a lot who do.

Sometimes there is more to smoking than just the physical effects or the buzz it gives you. As military, I can tell you that the social aspect of smoking (at least in military settings) is something that is very important. Its quite a tradeoff, your health for an abundance of rumours and information. The smoke deck is one of the most useful places to obtain information between divisions and get group collaberations.

Non smokers actually look to the smokers to see if they can "get any information on the smokedeck." While much of it is rumor, the senior smokers are pretty good at weeding out nonsense.

Now, enough of the specific social aspect that makes it seem acceptable to me.

Smoking is bad. Bad bad bad bad. There are tons of cancer causing bits, killing you slowly bits, and bits of well smoke. That crap doesnt need to be in your lungs one bit. But hey, its enjoyable to some extent. It does give you a little buzz, and it does fire off little feel goods in your brain. I am no scientest or doctor so I wont pretend to know what does what or why it is addictive.

It can be a money dump, health dump and give you chronically bad breath.

But for every evil, you just have to know how to properly keep yourself. If you smoke, maybe you should make sure to jog every day, brush your teeth twice as long, and eat a bit healthier. I know I do to try and offset the habit. plus I have to be in tip top shape for most of what I do.

Smoking all comes down to where you are, who you are and how you choose to do it. Hell, it might be a cop-out as some people say when life gets a bit too stressful, but here I am in japan, right after a huge mess. I'm alive, and I've been working 14 hours a day to restore power to several buildings, and helping people in wreckage. Its hard, I'm stressed, and I'll be damned if you tell me I can't have a cig.

Forum: General Discussion

Last post on thread was by Rob Kosy:

Ah, but I'll bet you were only 6 when you invented this word-fuelled Porsche of a site. in many ways, Chris, I liken you to Matthew Broderick in the movie 'War Games'. Y'know, when he hacks the USA's national defence system and gets to ask Stephen Hawking's 'Speak & Spell' for a game of Thermo Nuclear War? No?
Ah, well, maybe there is too much 80's in this reply, even for you.
But, seriously, Chris, a great achievement, my friend: standards high, membership big and not to mention the atmosphere this place generates.
Here's to 19 more.

Forum: Storyteller's Fire

Last post on thread was by Dcouch87:

I'm sure this is a large response, but I'm new here having just joined. I'd have to agree with the comments I've read however. As you write and go back over things you have previously written, you'll reorganize certain things, edit some things out, and change as you go. Don't worry about surviving chapters early on. Write some, then go back and reread it after a little time. You'll find the appropriate pauses to divide into chapters then. I wrote nearly 15,000 words within 3 chapters. Then when I went back a few days later while typing it from my writing, I realized one chapter could actually be two separate ones.

Forum: Storyteller's Fire

Last post on thread was by Dcouch87:

So I'm writing a historical fiction that takes place during world war 2. It follows the younger of two brothers throughout the war during his search for his older brother that was shot down over Europe. The younger enlists several months after his older brother, just after pearl harbor. He gets sent to the Pacific where he is wounded, then he volunteers for the rangers after he learns of his brother being a pow. My question is, should I add a love interest in the younger brothers life? I have added a way to do so if I choose to, but not sure how to follow. He has just finished his ranger training and is home on leave before being sent to England.

Forum: Announcements

Last post on thread was by Routh:

Stage 1 of this update, deploying SSL has been completed. All pages should show secure in your browsers and Chrome should report that it is using a "modern cipher suite".

I believe I have found all instances of "mixed insecure content" which usually means an image is being loaded with HTTP instead of HTTPS. I may have missed one or two. Please notify me if you find any by replying to this post.

Forum: General Discussion

Last post on thread was by Don Roble:

You're in the right place. Any genre works here.
As for critiques, the ones you get won't be- That's nice. It might be - That's nice because. There may be a but there too.
You also will get critiqued on grammar and spelling. You will know if your plot makes sense, not if it's any good; that's up to you.
To sum up- yea, this is the right place.

Forum: General Discussion

Last post on thread was by Rob Kosy:

Mr Cushions, please receive my cyber hug along with a massive apology for such a delayed reply.
I myself am fine and hoping that you and yours are in a similar fettle.
Time is a meagre mistress at the moment and, would you believe, I have written nothing (accept cheques) since this post; lots of family stuff going on . My mam, though not ill, isn't in the best of conditions physically and requires a lot more help than just twelve months ago. Stick that in the pot with a new management regime at work, allow to simmer for twelve months and out comes the best time/stress sandwich you could ever hope to feast upon. At last count the number of unpaid, extra, hours I have bagged at my place of employ totals three weeks. Blimey, with 21 days of uninterrupted writing I could have finished 'the herrings' and cornered the weird/slightly uncomfortable comedy market.
But enough that, onward and upwards as pompous, upper class knobs like to say.
Many thanks for your response to my "Sir Terry" post. I really was gutted at his passing. But since we have our very own 'Savage Pratchet' here on the den, his style (unwittingly echoed by your talented self) shall live on.
As for the election, you were right, Mr Cushions. the herrings were secreting a few creative juices. However, I have been unable to absorb and act upon them because of said time constraints. having said that David Macaroon has enjoyed a few scribbled notes upon the back of work memos and wage slips. Though I call him David Car Moron, since he obviously a cap driver since we never see him........driving.
Blimey, this is the longest time I've spent on the den all year.
Merry Christmas, savage. I hope you and yours have an excellent one and enjoy a fantastic new year.

Forum: The Editor's Desk

Last post on thread was by Don Roble:

You are using the italics as thoughts. No punctuation is needed or correct.
How am I alive? This is correct.

Forum: Storyteller's Fire

Last post on thread was by hobie roberts:

hey so i got an idea for a short story series and i kinda need help with like cover designs and stuff. my idea is for it to be a zombie book, but like through the zombies eyes, ive been thinking about it for a while and finally got some ideas for the actual plot of it, if any one would like to help with it ill give you my Skype, mostly i really need some one who can draw zombies pretty good for a cover of it, ill be printing it at my sisters work and making like short story's, plus my local book store said if they like it they can start to maby promote it there, ill also have it online to.

Forum: General Discussion

Last post on thread was by Routh:

Found this on Google+ today. Its worth reading and putting into practice.

Forum: General Discussion

Last post on thread was by mcglone:

Because I started off here and have deep respect for this website, I am writing this here.

I have finished my book (finally) but I need an outside view to check if everything is up to scratch. This only just dawned on me when I set my book up on Amazon as a pre-order title.

So, if anyone is willing to help I'd be greatful and I will even give you a complimentary copy of the the final book!

I hope you guys don't mind me posting this here.

Forum: The Editor's Desk

Last post on thread was by mcglone:

Because I started off here and have deep respect for this website, I am writing this here.

I have finished my book (finally) but I need an outside view to check if everything is up to scratch. This only just dawned on me when I set my book up on Amazon as a pre-order title.

So, if anyone is willing to help I'd be greatful and I will even give you a complimentary copy of the the final book!

I hope you guys don't mind me posting this here.

Forum: The Editor's Desk

Last post on thread was by Routh:

Heads up for those of you publishing to Amazon. Amazon is looking to change their pay model so you only get paid for pages read.

http://www.telegraph.co.uk/technology...-read.html

Forum: The Editor's Desk

Last post on thread was by Don Roble:

Gay lit sells well at Amazon.

Forum: Help and Support

Last post on thread was by Routh:

Hi,

The Den suffered a data loss in December. All writings and user accounts created after 2011 were lost.

Forum: Storyteller's Fire

Last post on thread was by Vollkrasser:

Hi,

I made a script/plot for new cases in the traditional style of Sir Arthur Conan Doyle"™s stories of Sherlock Holmes and Dr. Watson. That script is the basis for a non-commercial online adventure game version.

The first previews of the game are"¦

...here in video https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=LGY4thv8wG0

...here pics with the final lightning, scroll down in the forum, the last post on page 1 forum

...here is the first scene playable online (graphics there are just placeholdeers and will be replaced):
http://textadventures.co.uk/games/vie...n-of-sheba

The game ought to be in British English, best would be the old Victorian style of Sir Arthur Conan Doyle. I"™m not a native English speaker, and it would be a sacrilege to have even the slightest foreign accent for this. That would be German in my case, which is reserved for the villains already ;-)

So I"™m looking for a writer, who would like to take part in this project for free as I also do.
The workflow would be that he/she starts from my bad English script and writes a nice round story out of it that can then be the novel part of the adventure. Think of it as a bit like Dr. Watson did with the bare facts of Holmes: he made entertaining and exciting stories out of it. It would be similar with our cooperation for the adventure.

Best would be if the writer speaks a bit german, but it"™s not a must.
The final game will be free and online playable by everybody even without registration on the above platform.

The game is afoot!

If youre interested, just contact me via e-mail, which is described in 2 parts (to avoid-auto spam crawlers):
the first part is
reinarassa
the second part is
@googlemail.com
combine the two and you have the valid e-mail.

Best regards from germany/Bavaria!

Vollkrasser

Forum: The Editor's Desk

Last post on thread was by Routh:

This latest question should be posted into a new topic. Please use one thread per topic. Multiple topics in one thread is too difficult for people to follow and destroys a thread.

Forum: Bug Reports and Site Issues

Last post on thread was by Routh:

NovaCops writing has been fixed.

Thats all the reported work for now, please report any others.

Forum: General Discussion

Last post on thread was by Don Roble:

This sounds like you want to write this in the style of "The Seven Samurai's". You can find a short summary of it online. It tells about seven men who saw the same thing and told the story differently.

Forum: Storyteller's Fire

Last post on thread was by LawMatheson:

Forum: General Discussion

Last post on thread was by pirate60:

lol.

Forum: Storyteller's Fire

Last post on thread was by blue_veined_hatred:

I was busy doing the usual, laying back inside my cruiser and helping myself to more doughnuts every now and then, with an eye on the street. For most of the cops back at the station passing the night in a cruiser is something they would skip as often as they can manage. I was not most of the cops. Most of the cops do not have a marriage on the verge of dissolving into the most sour taste.
Rankton was as quite at that hour of the night. Quite enough for the rapidly approaching engine noise of a car revving up the road. I tossed back the half eaten doughnut into it's box and fumbled up to a feasible position.
I hardly recognized the brand of the car which fleetingly shot past the street but I clearly recognized the situation: a speeding case deep at night. This mght range from some adventure hungry delinquent to some high profile hit and run. Just at that moment, my radio cackled out:
"All units in the vicinity. A possible hit and run suspect has been seen going East found down Rosewood Boulevard. Suspect is driving a black Classic Ford Mustang. Requesting reports on visual."
"This is Z3005.I have a visual of a possible suspect. On pursuit."
I turned on the ignition and the on the lights, wailed the siren and zoomed out of the alley. Tonight is going to be a bumpy.

Forum: General Discussion

Last post on thread was by Rob Kosy:

It has been pointed out on a few occasions that summer is slow, and it's true.

I'm not getting a lot of time to visit at the moment either (though I wish it was because I was strolling & having fun outdoors, rather than being hemmed in at work; the holiday season, eh?).

kt, without disparaging Verm, Kerri & co I would say that you are the den's most consistent & revered critic. A 'good one' from yourself is an all day high. But the den without kt (at least in my time here) is akin to tea without water.

Looking forward to the resolution of your posting troubles.

Forum: General Discussion

Last post on thread was by tjwell01:

I agree e-publishing is tricky--I was just pointing out the cool feature about the site. Plus, I'm always on the look out for the new writing community.

Forum: Suggestions and Feature Requests

Last post on thread was by flickeringfairy:

I was wondering if it would be possible to not only search for type, but order them as well. In other words search "Poems" and then order from newest to oldest.

Just a thought,
FlickeringFairy

Forum: Poet's Corner

Last post on thread was by tjwell01:

Poetry becomes a different animal when read aloud. It takes shape and new meaning before your eyes. SAY IT!

Forum: General Discussion

Last post on thread was by Vermithrax:

A very warm (re)welcome from England, mister Bolger.

It's wonderful to hear from you, and great to know that you are back.

Forum: Poet's Corner

Last post on thread was by Routh:

The poet's Corner is a discussion forum for discussion techniques and methods with poems, it could be used for getting help with a particular rhyme, discussing poem styles, or your favourite author. It is not a posting area, so do not post poems here. The discussion forums are for just that, discussing.

Forum: Poet's Corner

Last post on thread was by LyraMidnight28:

This is a brilliant poem and think you have talent so continue to let it be recognised.