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The intention of this story was for it to be created as a manga or Webtoon unfortunately I am an amateur writer and lack the artistic skills to do so. It is still a good story though.
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Another trip to the Appalachias
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We got some Haiku, a Ghazal a Villanelle, a couple singular quatrains that could probably use some expanding. And Yeah. Don't let me forget that I have to comment on other people's writing as well - I'm posting this at midnight just before I go to bed.
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A story of a sexualy abused boy who finds a new life in Birmingham. A life of music.
Prologue and Chapter 1: Just finished writing the draft to this book. Clearly I'm super new to the writing world and would love some help knowing how to edit this. Feel free to shred it to pieces with some good editing advice, Thanks!!! Summery: A hunter for his village stumbles on a mythical creature.
Nathan and Mickey emigrate to Canada after the war. Nate opens a radio repair shop shortly after their arrival in Toronto. Mickey joins a secular Jewish organization that is supportive of the socialist movement and the Soviet Union, a precarious decision, considering the rising “Red Scare” originating south of the border. He attends their holiday dance and meets a Goldie, a precocious girl whose father owns a successful slipper factory. After a steamy night, the girl promises she will call him to set up another meeting. Finally, Goldie calls Nate long distance and arranges for them to meet at a swanky restaurant located in the Simpson’s department store in the city’s downtown. Goldie is no wallflower. She has a sailor’s mouth and a hatred of phoneys and hypocrites. She decides to have some fun with the staid diners with Nate’s assistance. The couple puts on a hilarious theatrical display that leaves the diners and staff horrified. It is important to note that the chapter takes place in 1950. In this context, many people of a younger age will be puzzled by some of the language which was relevant in those days eg: “yodel my groceries, bees knees, sissies, etc. The main theme is the intolerance and bigotry which was prevalent in Toronto, a city still controlled by the powerful WASP establishment. Ironically (and thankfully) the city today is the most ethnically diverse in the world.
Writing lessons.
I hate repeating myself. I absolutely hate repeating myself!
an old poem about two people
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A poem about the vulnerability of being human
Deeds and plots from the past start to boil over and push two souls over the edge.
If we could make all our dreams come true, with magic.
Feelings of a heartbroken girl
This was my first mini draft of my first ever piece,please don't be harsh it was hard for me to put it up in the first place.Tragedy strikes and a boy is sent to another land,2 left 1 arrived
A message from an unknown source claims to have knowledge of a great future mistake.
Jakob confronts the school bully after the funeral
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A series of short stories about the passing of time, and gods
City of God
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Mickey Okker, after emigrating to Canada joins a socialist club and meets up with a young women at a holiday dance.
What do you do when someone tells you NO?
Cody is laid to rest
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Boy meets girl type of a thingy
Why can't I do it?
Tucker patches a hole in the balloon keeping his Venus colony ship afloat, if he fails, him and his crew will be crushed by the planet's immense pressure. Hey, I'd like some feedback on this story - particularly then ending, it feels rather weak. Thank :)
Based on a dream I had, it's a romantic story in an enchanted place, which I believe shows the beauty of true love and how powerful it can be.
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A poem about a left-handed uprising, or 'people of alternative hands' as we prefer to be called (not at all to be taken seriously).
My usual stuff
The conforting feeling that lets me know God is by my side every day
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She needed to learn on her own. Everything takes time
Can a person tell the difference between being high on drugs and mental illness?
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The struggle and devotion of motherhood.
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Jakob attends Cody's funeral
A short, gothic story about a noble, whose curiosity will see him meet his fate.
Considering love
A short historical look at the Young Hegelians and a few of the most influential anarchist thinkers of the late-nineteenth-and-early-twentieth century with a focus on their religious beliefs and where they differ from Marxism.
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A poem about a man called Tom and what might go on behind closed doors.
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Loved the emotions felt with this. I could hear the song being played out in my head while reading. Great job.
But most people "of Aristocratic birth" play the piano, not the violin. 
See, if the man and the woman were an ideally matched couple, one of them would play piano and the other violin. That way they could play Mozart and Beethoven violin sonatas. 
I really liked haiku #2 (and yes, I agree that haiku is hard to write) and the quatrain "In Glass."
Very good.
I don't know. YOU tell me.
And it's all Charles Xavier's unintentional fault! 
Very good. Nicely done. And you are right, the X-Men would fail.
lol Tell me, was it prophesized that the broom would get burnt? 
This writing is the product of a poor education? I should have gone to college in your country.
Okay, it is obvious that English is not your first language. You need a good hard edit here. To wit: A peace of peaceful music. Not good. You need "A piece of peaceful music." Or perhaps selection would work better. Check a dictionary for the difference between "piece" and "peace."
Now, there is a format for writing a screenplay. It is strictly adhered to in the industry, because the format is easy to read. One assumes that directors, producers, actors, etc. will be reading it. Here is an example:
SCENE: A cheap bar. Hector and Achilles are sitting at the bar on barstools, sipping beer. Agamemnon is behind the bar, polishing mugs.
HECTOR: So, Achilles, you know my brother will not fight you. I must. And the gods have told me I will lose. I do not fear death. Will you give me a proper burial?
ACHILLES (Lying): Most assuredly. I always honor my enemies.
AGAMEMNON: Snickers
Get the idea?
@kt6550
After some editing, I took also your advice. I've modified the text so that the reader has to guess that the character is a lion.
Thanks
Damn it, Rob, I should have said something about making up British words. I have had some doubts about some of your words. If you read the Rob Saga, you will see what I mean.
Yes. I believe they reside in those delicious derrieres.
Jesus, Kt. You've done enough by reading this!
Okay, you need a good hard edit here. You have punctuation errors, and quotes begin with an upper case letter, just to name two.
This should be broken in two. The first part should be the delivery of the grand child to the old woman. You could expand that if you choose to do so. The second part should be the discovery of the beast.
Do good, hard edits on both.
This is superb. Very well done. I think I will even rate it.
Yea, some good advice to take way from that, Don.
"If you‛re writing for yourself there are n
o rules. Whatever you write is correct."
C'mon, Don. This is also true if you write for the tabloids or pen the odd speech for Don Trump....or even if you actually are Donald Trump.
For regular people (not me & certainly not you) I would agree with everything you've said except 'txt tlk.'
I love text talk, although I do agree that it appears amateurish. But that's why I love it!
With modern mobile phones and contracts and free this and free that, there is no need for abbreviated wording. In 'the old days,' when you were charged per character, you could understand the 'word economy.' Now, text talk is for the lazy. Exactly the kind of people writers like ourselves can thoroughly take the piss out of.
Ass alwayz, gud wrk, Don.
Wow!
This was brilliantly written, as usual, yet I believe you may have unlocked your inner Don Roble, KT.
I grinned all the way through this due to the fact you seem to have discovered a sarcasm bone which I haven't noticed before.
I really enjoyed this, Bob.
Great story,
Still needs some good editing. I found duplicate words a few times, like "the the" in the first paragraph. Overall, in my opinion, the first four paragraphs seemed a bit choppy and I had to reread them to understand the flow. However, after that, the story fell into a very nice rhythm and was a really great read.
With some good editing, this is the start of a great story.
One of the worst* you mean
Thx for the comments KT. Yes, M is probably the worst slop ever fermented in a barrel, although I question whether it was even made from grapes, more like sugar cane and dirty socks! Although in Canada, we have a wine made by a co. called “Brights” which sold an amazingly terrible cheap wine that was the favourite of alcoholics and the homeless. Not sure if it still in biz. Hope not. There’s a homeless lady in a later chapter who has a penchant for Brights.
I agree with you on this. When I was young, I took a girl on a date to see "Love Story." I thought it was one of the worst movies ever made. She ended up hating me because of that opinion.
A few years ago, I got a chance to watch it again. I thought I may have mellowed a bit since I have become a senior citizen.
Nope. I was right the first time around. It is still one of the first movies made.
schvartze- I think this is spelled schwarze. In German and Yiddish, z is pronounced ts.
This was great! I love it. Maybe it's because I had two friends grow up in Yiddish culture.
Oh, and by the way, Manischwitz is about the worst-tasting wine in the world.
Very nice bit of wisdom here, Don. And it is all quite true.
Yes, Kt. We must cherish freedom of expression!
This a great reminder for me, and much needed education for new writers. Thanks for the post!
Good points. Thanks for the wisdom.
Thank you. I will add that to my list of personal errors to keep an eye on.
lmao! Absolutely marvelous! Wonderful!
I really liked this. An unusual presentation of a very sensitive and difficult subject. Nice job.
lol Tell me, does your philosophy discuss whether a roasted chicken minds being eaten?
Excellent. Very good.
You have a good story here. In fact, this could be the first chapter to something much longer. However, you need a good editing.
You have a lot of improper word usage here, such as "threw" as opposed to "through." There are plenty of other examples. You also have some rough paragraph and sentence structure.
A good edit would allow you to catch these errors and clean them up.
Please continue on with this.
Very nice. One little caveat:
"Close friends, once held dear,
viewed now as quite foes;"
"quite foes" or "quiet foes" ?
Nicely written, but, like Don says, you can easily expand this.
Okay, it is quite obvious that English is not your first language. Considering that, you have the beginning of what could be a good story.
Now, what you need here is a very serious edit. Get help if you need it. That will help you spot errors and you can correct them.
Okay, you have some rough sentences and you need a good editing to clear them up. Now, one big thing.
This is a great concept for a plot. However, you present it in a rather rough manner. I would outline the story, and rewrite the story from the outline. It would clean up a whole lot and allow you to fill in the gaps in the plot.
Please continue on with your writing.
bbcool36 touched on the problems, so I will not elaborate.
You have a nice style, and good imagery here. You need to deal with the formatting issue I pointed out on you last story. I think that would help clear up some of the problems.
Other than that, please continue.
Very good. A tad short, but you get your point across.
I really enjoyed this. Quite a good concept and presentation. I do think, however, you could have added a bit more to the prose sections and fleshed them out a bit.
Quite a marvelous, and honest, point you make here. Wonderful job.
Ouch! Excellent. In some countries, it is all too true.
In America, they only report bullshit, like what so-and-so wore to the theater.
Oh, and Hitler had journalist killed he didn't like.
Okay, this is pretty good. It flows beautifully and the imagery is excellent. But, there are a couple of things.
The first is that it has an unfinished feel. Where are you going to go with this? Seems that closing scene needs to be ended properly.
The second is dialog. You do this: "Nice day if it don't rain," Harry said. "Good day if you are a duck," James added.
That is wrong. If you decide to publish, and editor will require you to do this:
"Nice day if it don't rain," Harry said.
"Good day if you are a duck," James added.
In short, a seperate paragraph for each character change.
Lastly, please be so kind as to add an adult warning to this.
Indeed, Kt.
Very nice introduction. You going to expand this? I hope so.
This rewrite shows some very nice improvement in your original posting. The story flows much smoother and you have some excellent imagery. Good job.
You still have a few small errors, mostly punctuation. A good edit will catch them.
Well, you need to edit the title.
Quite dark, like the last poem. And, like the last poem, you could use a bit of punctuation. Other than that, you capture the mood.
Indeed, a very dark vacation.
Pretty good. Could use a little punctuation though, to help with phrasing.
An attack of conscience over the killing of a harmless tortoise? Possibly.
Strong and impressive. Only thing I can think of after reading this is the line. "Nice Guys Finish Last" Keep up the good work.
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Forum: General Discussion
Last post on thread was by Don Roble:
PM me so I remember to do it. I write very short stories.
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Last post on thread was by Routh:
I have applied a change to fix the file permissions. Avatars can be uploaded again.
I am also closing and locking this thread as it is ancient. Please open new threads if there is nothing withing the last 90 days about an issue, as it is likely far from relevant anymore. The previous instances have nothing to do with each other, nor does this one.
Forum: Help and Support
Last post on thread was by Routh:
Maybe this is a stupid question, but...
Can I add "chapters" in my stories? Like having different pages for them.
If so, how do I do that?
Thank you!
Hi @luzzifer - Chapters will be a feature coming back in Version 5, which I am still working on perfecting. I was in version 4 but the implementation was very bad.
What I recommend you do is create a separate story post for each chapter and the same title. This way when someone looks at your profile they'll be able to see the chapters in order thanks to alphanumeric sorting.
Example:
This is My Great Story - Chapter 1
If you have a chapter title you can add it to the description in bold italics or to the top of the chapter body.
When the new version comes out, you'll be able to 'bind' these individual chapters into a novel, poetry book or other book type.
Forum: General Discussion
Last post on thread was by PseudoScribe:
so don I might not have explained it right but i think i may need ghost artists if such a thing exists. I want to write the story and have illustrations made to compliment it
Forum: Help and Support
Last post on thread was by XxDARKGHOSTZX9:
Sir i had an extremely awful day at that time. My spouse was in the hospital, and my family member passed away and my twin brother passed on all in the same month. I am truly sorry for the way that i acted . I am normally not prone to such reactions. The fault was mine and i responded in anger due to my own circumstances.. I apologize sincerely and will use this site as a means to portray future literary work. As it stands, before i noticed your reply i had already updated one work on my profile earlier today. Please forgive and if there is any format or situation. That i can help with i would be more then happy too.
Forum: General Discussion
Last post on thread was by Routh:
With the recent post flood that the site saw, I was made aware of some incorrect expectations of what specific pages are intended to be used for, and reminded of some of the issues on this version of the site.
Firstly, the intended place to see the latest posts is the 'Latest Activity Feed', now featured with the link 'Latest Activity' in the main menu to clarify it's use. This view shows the latest 50 posts or more, and will concatenate multiple posts by one user to a single entry. This is the best and only place you should be using to 'catch up' from your last visit.
The 'Newest' page in the Writings Archive (now renamed to Library) has been renamed to 'Newest to Oldest'. This page is a chronological archive view for searching through all posts by date, and it is not intended for users to use to catch up on posts. As such, post concatenation will never be used here. Not to mention that post concatenation is largely incompatible with pagination, and to try and do both cleanly and without error would make for a very slow page.
Now, on the topic of the post flood, which has been discussed before here. The new version of the site will introduce the Karma system, which will be a point based system that will give users points for commenting, posting forum posts and rating writings, and deduct points for posting writings. New users will start with enough points for 2 posts, and old users will earn a score based on their history. This is intended to solve the biggest issue The Den faces in the 'social' era of the Internet, where users have become rather anti-social and post content expecting comments without participating on the site by doing so themselves. To be clear though, if a user has enough posts to post 30 writings at once, the Karma system will not prevent this, and never will. This will be handled via post concatenation in the feeds, which will prevent other users posts from being pushed off the feeds by mass posting. The Library pages however will never concatenate posts.
Version 5 will also introduce the concept of 'following' a writer. So if you want to ensure you never miss posts by your favourite writers, you will be able to follow them and you will have a dedicated 'following' feed to just these users posts and activity.
Forum: Announcements
Last post on thread was by Routh:
Update:
I stand corrected, gender was part of v4 and not v3, and v3 did allow me to remove birthdate. So that field and all it's data have been removed from user profiles and the database.
Forum: General Discussion
Last post on thread was by Loothier:
About ten, maybe even fifteen years ago, when the Internet was still young, I chanced upon an amateur author's website. I spent many nights reading his stories about the ever-diminishing possibilities of science caused by more-dimensional beings squeezed into our world, and the immortal lady (created accidentally in some scientific experiment) struggling to keep the human race alive through the eons, storing knowledge in the roughest form possible as the universe kept loosing detail. Another story was about superheroes that got exponentially more powerful, and more deranged, each time a new one was turned, and the previous people who tried to stop the next ones. Around the tragic time I lost the bookmark, he was writing about magic (which worked like programming with math inside the mind) used to engineer some parts in a space shuttle that exploded. His website had yellow text on a dark gray blue background, if I remember correctly. He did occasional rant posts on science and programming subjects too.
I would very much like to read those stories again. Does someone on this forum know the author or his website? Or a better place to ask?
Forum: The Editor's Desk
Last post on thread was by chancematthews01:
I am a new amateur writer. I have book one already posted. I would really like help with editing. Do a Search for "Chi Warrior Saga - Book 1"
Forum: General Discussion
Last post on thread was by Phillip Cain:
Hello all. Subject is pretty straight forward. I have been considering a switch in majors at my local community college into creative writing or something close to it (not even fully aware of my options yet to be honest), but I would like to know how it happened for you. Was it an epiphany moment, something you fell into, or something that was always present in you.
edit: it really labels me an ink virgin lol, what a knee slapper
Forum: General Discussion
Last post on thread was by Rob Kosy:
Now that's a proper critique and hard, fair and good advice.
The one draw back for me about E-books, Kindle & such is that 'anyone' can publish. For example there's a guy who puts out fabulous, professional covers and calls himself Stephen King. The type face is even similar, very much similar, in-fact. But he is not the Stephen King. a fact that is painfully evident once you start suffering......I mean reading.
There are also some excellent stories and ideas but the writing is not to the standard you would expect.
Forum: Help and Support
Last post on thread was by Nurwanti:
I also have the same question, thanks for asking
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This should not be an issue anymore.
Forum: General Discussion
Last post on thread was by Routh:
This short post has some quick and easy ways to improve your writing.
https://medium.com/an-idea-for-you/the-two-minutes-it-takes-to-read-this-will-improve-your-writing-forever-82a7d01441d1#.vr45txmxo
Forum: Off Topics
Last post on thread was by SirSludge:
It's been years and now it's back
we got the counting in the sack
Now in this fort
there is a court
but you do not sue
because it's 22!
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No, that's not right!
The numbers aren't tight
I don't want to be a bore,
but I tell you, it's 54!
Forum: General Discussion
Last post on thread was by Don Roble:
Forget original. The last original idea was Jules Verne.
Write what you want. Write it as well as you can. If you post it, someone will read and comment. It sometimes takes a week or so. You will get the unvarnished truth. There's certain rules that never change in writing. Opinions as to the story or whatever you write is just an opinion. Never, never take it personally. Personal stuff will be deleted.
Forum: General Discussion
Last post on thread was by Don Roble:
If the narrator is unable to hear it you can't tell it. Write the one side to be obvious in what is being said.
"You were hit by a rock?"
"Twenty-two stitches! Wow!"
Forum: General Discussion
Last post on thread was by Don Roble:
I don't know where to start answering this question.
Look around the net for basic writing. That's a start.
I would skip that and write. The primary thing is to tell a story. Don't try to tell it like anyone but yourself. Don't rush things. Writing takes time. read your own words as you start each writing session. Keep the pace even.
Check your spelling. Check your grammar. Read it out loud. Does it sound right?
Don't look too far ahead unless you have an outline of what you want to achieve.
There are other things to do but this is a start.
Forum: General Discussion
Last post on thread was by trubolotta:
Just a few suggestions from someone who has done a lot of technical writing but now wants to do SciFi writing.
- 1. Set up a crib sheet of people (or entities), places and things with descriptions to help you be consistent throughout the story. You don't have to reveal all detail at one time, but being consistent over a period of time helps readers.
- 2. I write a plot outline and sometimes three, four or five. Some interconnect, some do not. Some I dump and some I polish. It doesn't take long and can be very generalized using your own brand of shorthand.
- 3. Work your chapters. I'll rewrite, chop and mince a chapter as much as necessary until it reads and fits the way I want it to read and fit. I've even scrapped entire chapters, salvaging only a few good parts and dropping the rest.
- 4. Ideas sheet - its a document I always keep to paste in ideas I think were good but just in the wrong place in the story.
- 5. Finally, don't take my word for it. I'm brand new at fiction writing and I'm sure more experienced writers can give you good advice.
Forum: General Discussion
Last post on thread was by Routh:
I will hopefully have this implemented before too long along with a new version of the site. It's currently a work in progress, about halfway done.
Forum: General Discussion
Last post on thread was by flickeringfairy:
There have been some in the past and some that dabble in a little bit of everything.
Forum: General Discussion
Last post on thread was by Demonic:
I'd love to check it out. I'm kind of in the same boat as you, writing a story but don't have all of it worked out yet. I'll have to check out chapter one.
Forum: General Discussion
Last post on thread was by Kholm:
I read once that military folk are somewhere around 90% more likely to smoke then non military. Now don't mistake that for 90% of military people smoke, but there are a lot who do.
Sometimes there is more to smoking than just the physical effects or the buzz it gives you. As military, I can tell you that the social aspect of smoking (at least in military settings) is something that is very important. Its quite a tradeoff, your health for an abundance of rumours and information. The smoke deck is one of the most useful places to obtain information between divisions and get group collaberations.
Non smokers actually look to the smokers to see if they can "get any information on the smokedeck." While much of it is rumor, the senior smokers are pretty good at weeding out nonsense.
Now, enough of the specific social aspect that makes it seem acceptable to me.
Smoking is bad. Bad bad bad bad. There are tons of cancer causing bits, killing you slowly bits, and bits of well smoke. That crap doesnt need to be in your lungs one bit. But hey, its enjoyable to some extent. It does give you a little buzz, and it does fire off little feel goods in your brain. I am no scientest or doctor so I wont pretend to know what does what or why it is addictive.
It can be a money dump, health dump and give you chronically bad breath.
But for every evil, you just have to know how to properly keep yourself. If you smoke, maybe you should make sure to jog every day, brush your teeth twice as long, and eat a bit healthier. I know I do to try and offset the habit. plus I have to be in tip top shape for most of what I do.
Smoking all comes down to where you are, who you are and how you choose to do it. Hell, it might be a cop-out as some people say when life gets a bit too stressful, but here I am in japan, right after a huge mess. I'm alive, and I've been working 14 hours a day to restore power to several buildings, and helping people in wreckage. Its hard, I'm stressed, and I'll be damned if you tell me I can't have a cig.
Forum: General Discussion
Last post on thread was by Rob Kosy:
Ah, but I'll bet you were only 6 when you invented this word-fuelled Porsche of a site. in many ways, Chris, I liken you to Matthew Broderick in the movie 'War Games'. Y'know, when he hacks the USA's national defence system and gets to ask Stephen Hawking's 'Speak & Spell' for a game of Thermo Nuclear War? No?
Ah, well, maybe there is too much 80's in this reply, even for you.
But, seriously, Chris, a great achievement, my friend: standards high, membership big and not to mention the atmosphere this place generates.
Here's to 19 more.
Forum: Storyteller's Fire
Last post on thread was by Dcouch87:
I'm sure this is a large response, but I'm new here having just joined. I'd have to agree with the comments I've read however. As you write and go back over things you have previously written, you'll reorganize certain things, edit some things out, and change as you go. Don't worry about surviving chapters early on. Write some, then go back and reread it after a little time. You'll find the appropriate pauses to divide into chapters then. I wrote nearly 15,000 words within 3 chapters. Then when I went back a few days later while typing it from my writing, I realized one chapter could actually be two separate ones.
Forum: Storyteller's Fire
Last post on thread was by Dcouch87:
So I'm writing a historical fiction that takes place during world war 2. It follows the younger of two brothers throughout the war during his search for his older brother that was shot down over Europe. The younger enlists several months after his older brother, just after pearl harbor. He gets sent to the Pacific where he is wounded, then he volunteers for the rangers after he learns of his brother being a pow. My question is, should I add a love interest in the younger brothers life? I have added a way to do so if I choose to, but not sure how to follow. He has just finished his ranger training and is home on leave before being sent to England.
Forum: Announcements
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Forum: General Discussion
Last post on thread was by Don Roble:
You're in the right place. Any genre works here.
As for critiques, the ones you get won't be- That's nice. It might be - That's nice because. There may be a but there too.
You also will get critiqued on grammar and spelling. You will know if your plot makes sense, not if it's any good; that's up to you.
To sum up- yea, this is the right place.
Forum: General Discussion
Last post on thread was by Rob Kosy:
Mr Cushions, please receive my cyber hug along with a massive apology for such a delayed reply.
I myself am fine and hoping that you and yours are in a similar fettle.
Time is a meagre mistress at the moment and, would you believe, I have written nothing (accept cheques) since this post; lots of family stuff going on . My mam, though not ill, isn't in the best of conditions physically and requires a lot more help than just twelve months ago. Stick that in the pot with a new management regime at work, allow to simmer for twelve months and out comes the best time/stress sandwich you could ever hope to feast upon. At last count the number of unpaid, extra, hours I have bagged at my place of employ totals three weeks. Blimey, with 21 days of uninterrupted writing I could have finished 'the herrings' and cornered the weird/slightly uncomfortable comedy market.
But enough that, onward and upwards as pompous, upper class knobs like to say.
Many thanks for your response to my "Sir Terry" post. I really was gutted at his passing. But since we have our very own 'Savage Pratchet' here on the den, his style (unwittingly echoed by your talented self) shall live on.
As for the election, you were right, Mr Cushions. the herrings were secreting a few creative juices. However, I have been unable to absorb and act upon them because of said time constraints. having said that David Macaroon has enjoyed a few scribbled notes upon the back of work memos and wage slips. Though I call him David Car Moron, since he obviously a cap driver since we never see him........driving.
Blimey, this is the longest time I've spent on the den all year.
Merry Christmas, savage. I hope you and yours have an excellent one and enjoy a fantastic new year.
Forum: The Editor's Desk
Last post on thread was by Don Roble:
You are using the italics as thoughts. No punctuation is needed or correct.
How am I alive? This is correct.
Forum: Storyteller's Fire
Last post on thread was by hobie roberts:
hey so i got an idea for a short story series and i kinda need help with like cover designs and stuff. my idea is for it to be a zombie book, but like through the zombies eyes, ive been thinking about it for a while and finally got some ideas for the actual plot of it, if any one would like to help with it ill give you my Skype, mostly i really need some one who can draw zombies pretty good for a cover of it, ill be printing it at my sisters work and making like short story's, plus my local book store said if they like it they can start to maby promote it there, ill also have it online to.
Forum: General Discussion
Last post on thread was by Routh:
Found this on Google+ today. Its worth reading and putting into practice.
Forum: General Discussion
Last post on thread was by mcglone:
Because I started off here and have deep respect for this website, I am writing this here.
I have finished my book (finally) but I need an outside view to check if everything is up to scratch. This only just dawned on me when I set my book up on Amazon as a pre-order title.
So, if anyone is willing to help I'd be greatful and I will even give you a complimentary copy of the the final book!
I hope you guys don't mind me posting this here.
Forum: The Editor's Desk
Last post on thread was by mcglone:
Because I started off here and have deep respect for this website, I am writing this here.
I have finished my book (finally) but I need an outside view to check if everything is up to scratch. This only just dawned on me when I set my book up on Amazon as a pre-order title.
So, if anyone is willing to help I'd be greatful and I will even give you a complimentary copy of the the final book!
I hope you guys don't mind me posting this here.
Forum: The Editor's Desk
Last post on thread was by Routh:
Heads up for those of you publishing to Amazon. Amazon is looking to change their pay model so you only get paid for pages read.
http://www.telegraph.co.uk/technology...-read.html
Forum: Storyteller's Fire
Last post on thread was by Vollkrasser:
Hi,
I made a script/plot for new cases in the traditional style of Sir Arthur Conan Doyle"™s stories of Sherlock Holmes and Dr. Watson. That script is the basis for a non-commercial online adventure game version.
The first previews of the game are"¦
...here in video https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=LGY4thv8wG0
...here pics with the final lightning, scroll down in the forum, the last post on page 1 forum
...here is the first scene playable online (graphics there are just placeholdeers and will be replaced):
http://textadventures.co.uk/games/vie...n-of-sheba
The game ought to be in British English, best would be the old Victorian style of Sir Arthur Conan Doyle. I"™m not a native English speaker, and it would be a sacrilege to have even the slightest foreign accent for this. That would be German in my case, which is reserved for the villains already ;-)
So I"™m looking for a writer, who would like to take part in this project for free as I also do.
The workflow would be that he/she starts from my bad English script and writes a nice round story out of it that can then be the novel part of the adventure. Think of it as a bit like Dr. Watson did with the bare facts of Holmes: he made entertaining and exciting stories out of it. It would be similar with our cooperation for the adventure.
Best would be if the writer speaks a bit german, but it"™s not a must.
The final game will be free and online playable by everybody even without registration on the above platform.
The game is afoot!
If youre interested, just contact me via e-mail, which is described in 2 parts (to avoid-auto spam crawlers):
the first part is
reinarassa
the second part is
@googlemail.com
combine the two and you have the valid e-mail.
Best regards from germany/Bavaria!
Vollkrasser
Forum: The Editor's Desk
Last post on thread was by Routh:
This latest question should be posted into a new topic. Please use one thread per topic. Multiple topics in one thread is too difficult for people to follow and destroys a thread.
Forum: Bug Reports and Site Issues
Last post on thread was by Routh:
NovaCops writing has been fixed.
Thats all the reported work for now, please report any others.
Forum: General Discussion
Last post on thread was by Don Roble:
This sounds like you want to write this in the style of "The Seven Samurai's". You can find a short summary of it online. It tells about seven men who saw the same thing and told the story differently.
Forum: Storyteller's Fire
Last post on thread was by LawMatheson:
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The Chronicles are 144,000 words long, and took me the better part of fifteen years to get right.
I can't seem to write anything of less than 5000 words, and they tend to get away from me.
Don't know why this is; I think I just get caught up in the story.
At the moment, a chapter will take me about two -three days, with re-reads, and re-writes.
I get what you mean when you say you get caught up in a story, for me, it's almost like 'The DOSCO Files' are writing themselves. I have One chapter posted here, but I have three books worth of material. I am just going back and smoothing things out. I am struggling with word count and pages in a chapter, so this post was helpful.
Forum: Storyteller's Fire
Last post on thread was by blue_veined_hatred:
I was busy doing the usual, laying back inside my cruiser and helping myself to more doughnuts every now and then, with an eye on the street. For most of the cops back at the station passing the night in a cruiser is something they would skip as often as they can manage. I was not most of the cops. Most of the cops do not have a marriage on the verge of dissolving into the most sour taste.
Rankton was as quite at that hour of the night. Quite enough for the rapidly approaching engine noise of a car revving up the road. I tossed back the half eaten doughnut into it's box and fumbled up to a feasible position.
I hardly recognized the brand of the car which fleetingly shot past the street but I clearly recognized the situation: a speeding case deep at night. This mght range from some adventure hungry delinquent to some high profile hit and run. Just at that moment, my radio cackled out:
"All units in the vicinity. A possible hit and run suspect has been seen going East found down Rosewood Boulevard. Suspect is driving a black Classic Ford Mustang. Requesting reports on visual."
"This is Z3005.I have a visual of a possible suspect. On pursuit."
I turned on the ignition and the on the lights, wailed the siren and zoomed out of the alley. Tonight is going to be a bumpy.
Forum: General Discussion
Last post on thread was by Rob Kosy:
It has been pointed out on a few occasions that summer is slow, and it's true.
I'm not getting a lot of time to visit at the moment either (though I wish it was because I was strolling & having fun outdoors, rather than being hemmed in at work; the holiday season, eh?).
kt, without disparaging Verm, Kerri & co I would say that you are the den's most consistent & revered critic. A 'good one' from yourself is an all day high. But the den without kt (at least in my time here) is akin to tea without water.
Looking forward to the resolution of your posting troubles.
Forum: General Discussion
Last post on thread was by tjwell01:
I agree e-publishing is tricky--I was just pointing out the cool feature about the site. Plus, I'm always on the look out for the new writing community.
Forum: Suggestions and Feature Requests
Last post on thread was by flickeringfairy:
I was wondering if it would be possible to not only search for type, but order them as well. In other words search "Poems" and then order from newest to oldest.
Just a thought,
FlickeringFairy
Forum: Poet's Corner
Last post on thread was by tjwell01:
Poetry becomes a different animal when read aloud. It takes shape and new meaning before your eyes. SAY IT!
Forum: General Discussion
Last post on thread was by Vermithrax:
A very warm (re)welcome from England, mister Bolger.
It's wonderful to hear from you, and great to know that you are back.
