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Experiences that remind us we are alive
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Excerpt from my current project.
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Uhhh i dissociated writing this
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A short scene of a knight after a battle.
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That crippling feeling of nostalgia for you ;) I also don't know how to end it so please help!
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Iraq

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Hope to bring attention to mental health issues concerning soldiers and the affect war has on a soldiers mind
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My first attempt at creative writing......
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A snake on a plane isn't comfortable
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A smile can hide a thousand feelings. You sometimes need to look deeper to see what lies beneath
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A man tries to get home for Christmas
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Animal's food chaion
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Difference between assumption and reality.

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    English poem about love, translated from Greek language
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    A short chapter from a book i'm working on. Would love to get some feedback. Sorry about the format; it's a work in progress
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    This is my first time submitting my work! Looking for ANY kind of feedback on this piece I started a couple of days ago.
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    A bit of a sensual poem... not for the young minds.
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    What you see isn't what is there.
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    Years of long hours have beaten Aaron Casper into a day to day of self medication and lousy home habits. The only thing that can keep his mind busy is the job that pays his bills, or as he likes to call it, "The Hunt". This is a short story series about a man defeated by his years, who struggles with mental illness and the moral fiber of his delicate profession.
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    Alive

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    :)

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    I wrote this for my dear mother, for the event of her 97th birthday.
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    Release & Realize

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    Dead or alive, people can be a pain in the ass.
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    a short poem
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    Together They Won

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    Teamwork

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  • Human is she
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    Today's reality
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    Who knew I would have to say... me too.
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    Jealousy

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    To vent my imotions.

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    Some people aren't cut out to rob banks
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    Exams

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    My simple attempt to pen down random thoughts for small children.
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    A police detective solves a crime...
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    Chill

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    A story about summoning a demon, sort of.
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    Halloween poem
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    A story of love
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    Young Jakob and his teacher Mr. McCloud get involved in a classroom row which turns physical. McCloud loses his cool and yells out a racist taunt. Jakob’s parents are notified of an emergency meeting between the school officials and the two combatants. The chapter focuses on the teacher on the day of the meeting. We learn that his life is in turmoil: his wife has thrown him out of the house and he has no idea about possible disciplinarian action that might be forthcoming. Also, the memories of his war years as a POW are beginning to haunt him again.
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    An acrostic poem that describes myself.

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    Jakob Okker, his wife Sarah and youngest daughter Anna are forced into hiding by the increasing threats by Nazi occupied Amsterdam. They find shelter in their friend’s hotel. They are captured by Gestapo agents thanks to the betrayal by an employee of Jakob’s diamond factory. Anna’s parents and the hotel owners are taken away. Anna is viciously gang raped by Dutch police officers.
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    Hav-A-Tampas

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    Going in to the basement and finding the Hav-A-Tampa boxes.

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    The intention of this story was for it to be created as a manga or Webtoon unfortunately I am an amateur writer and lack the artistic skills to do so. It is still a good story though.
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    2-A Ghost Story

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    Conclusion to Part 1. A different type of ghost story.

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    Another trip to the Appalachias
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    We got some Haiku, a Ghazal a Villanelle, a couple singular quatrains that could probably use some expanding. And Yeah. Don't let me forget that I have to comment on other people's writing as well - I'm posting this at midnight just before I go to bed.

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    I think you do yourself a disservice with your intro. My grammar isn't great either but your story is interesting and emotive.

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    "the ink bleeding into the emptiness of the page"

    I like that, very good.

    I enjoyed the story the ending was well written.

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    Go to the Blue Book of Grammar. The grammar and sentence structure is not done well.

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    The last Knight rises to the field of death- from -the field.

    "Holy father I beg of you=- comma after father.


    Tears from the sky- tears?


    This a very good story, It is well-plotted and has a great ending.

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    At first, I'd opted for your first suggestion, then wrote it the way I wrote it. Now I know I should have. Smile

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    Yes, quiet*
    Thank you!

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    are you thinking of perception rather than an assumption?

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    I enjoy the concept and imagery! However, there are some run-on sentences that can be corrected. It is also important to remember that short, simple sentences are the easiest to start with when writing. I would love to read a follow up!

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    This felt very poetic to me, and I can't wait to read more. The imagery at the start especially drew me in.

    kt6550 commented on Iraq

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    Okay, I think you have made one big error here.

    You have written this as poetry. Write it as a real-life essay. If you are going to present it in poetry form, you need to be much more abstract.

    I feel I have the right to make this criticism as I am a Vietnam vet.

    Please give this comment some very serious thought.

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    Hmmmmm...... "When dreams of the future are finally awake."

    Try "Where dreams of the future are finally awake." or
    "When dreams of the future awaken."

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    “Nearly,” he thought to himself, “maybe next time”. - You really don't need to use the reflexive pronoun "himself." It sort of gets in the way. "he thought" works well enough.

    “Strange”, he said aloud ... One usually says things aloud. Word not needed. Try "he said softly," "he muttered," "he murrmured."

    These are commonly referred to as "weedy words." Just as weeds clog up a garden, weedy words clog up a writing. Try, whenever possible, NOT to use adverbs. There are times when they are needed, but, keep a thesaurus open when you are writing and look for the proper verb.

    "he said loudly" is far more effective as "he shouted," "he yelled," or "he bellowed."

    You also have some incomplete sentences that need fixing.

    I would pull this down, do a good, hard, edit, and repost. Or just do a good, hard edit and post that.

    That said, a good effort for your first time out. I am curious as to where this plot goes. I would like to see more of it. Please continue and welcome to the Den! Cool

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    lmao! Fantastic! Great ending, Don! Superb!

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    You have not posted in a while. Good to have you back.

    A lovely poem, with excellent imagery and a good sense of pace and timing. Well done!

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    "quite dance" I think you mean "quiet dance"

    My experience with grazing cattle suggests that they may not give a damn, one way or the other. Cool

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    You need to place a space between paragraphs here. You wouldn't do normally but here we can't read what you write without a great effort.

    Even reading the paragraphs you did, you need to shorten them. Look up the grammar rules for paragraphs.


    https://awc.ashford.edu/PDFHandouts%5CHow%20to%20Write%20a%20Good%20Paragraph_final.pdf

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    You need to put a space between paragraphs here. If you don't, it looks like a wall of words.

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    Very well written, I like the message and its flow.Smile

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    As much as I could say, I think "nice story" says it best.

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    lol A great observation Don. One little caveat:

    The hyena pack is a much more effective hunter then the lion. The problem is, animal for animal, an individual lion is much larger than a hyena. And a pride of lions (only the females hunt, the males sunbathe all day) will chase the hyenas away after they bring down the animal.

    Who said life was fair, even for animals?

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    Ooops! You did a double posting. You may want to delete this one.

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    Well, now, everyone jumped on your case without recognizing a cognizant fact. English is not your first language, and that is intuitively obvious and painfully clear. Cool

    That said, there is an excellent argument in here that is masked by your English. Now, you need to get someone to help you. This needs a good, hard edit. Sentences need fixing and you have to break this into paragraphs.

    If you need help, this is where we live. Don't be afraid to ask.

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    Very nice, especially since it was translated from the Greek.

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    Such clear and vivid beauty in this lines, felt it and enjoyed it, good jobSmile

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    Thanks for catching that. I meant to use a comma there. "or" is a better choice.

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    > One little slip up one radiation release and creatures are going to be gone. Even the grass chomping, herbivores would die off.

    One little slip up or one radiation release, and creatures are going to be gone. Even the grass-chomping herbivores would die off.

    Just a suggestion. I love this though and yes, mankind is heartless lol

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    Karan, I mean for you to become a better writer. I'm a hard judge of writing. I know the good from the bad. I know that the thought is only part of the writing. There are methods that work and methods that don't. The rules never change. Every writing starts with readability. Lacking that and all you have a wall of words.

    Keep writing no matter what anyone says. Write whatever way you can. Learn to write properly and you can edit.

    You show a good attitude. I have have writing shredded. It was done nicely but the shredding was still done. It's very easy to read past your own mistakes. You simply don't see what someone else sees.

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    Don Roble , I would really like to appreciate your feedback. It will certainly help me to improve my writing.

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    I agree with Don's comment. Perhaps you would gain more from reading and commenting on other members submissions and engaging with the community. Smile

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    You need to find out how to write clauses.


    Assumption and reality has been two aspects of a human life. Which helps in developing thought process in every individual with different ethnic, cultural, social and financial status.

    Assumption and reality has been two aspects of a human life which helps in developing thought process in every individual with different ethnic, cultural, social and financial status.

    As soon as you got to "which" you were writing clause and not ending a sentence. You do this time and time again.

    Your sentences are far too long.

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    Terrific description and imagery as is par for the course with a Madhatter piece. Sure to elicit a spark of desire in the reader themselves. Very well done.

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    Sexy moonlit dance leading to passion in the bed - why did I see Antonio Banderas and Selma Hayak??? lol Great piece.

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    Thank you @Don
    Roble, that means so much! Hopefully I can get this book out soon. Shouldn't be much longer. @KT6550
    Thanks kt! This is a really rough draft i need to do more work on it for sure

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    This is a quite good scene. A very human encounter between the two individuals. I would like to read more.

    "She’d have wanted a slice had her stomach were up to it." - This sentence is incorrect. You have a few like this in here. I would fix them.

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    You have a natural way of writing. You seem to go long effortlessly and I knpow that's not true. You seem to put this together perfectly. You are not rushing along like some hurricane wind.

    You tell so much we need to know before we realize you've dome it.

    I have always held you to a high bar because of your natural talent. You have certainly reached it with this.

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    What is this supposes to be about?

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    A good start. It is a bit rough; you do need some editing, and also an ending.

    I would edit, clean up the shaky sentences, and put an ending on it. Please continue.

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    Oh, my! Not for children, indeed! Participation in this activity, however, may create children! Cool

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    lol However, Don, somehow I cannot see Bela smacking himself on the head! Cool

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    Madhatter, no. I corrected that. This is an example of my shout.

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    Yes, those two have it down. You need an edit. Also, I think (and this is personal taste) that you get too detailed. I would trim it a bit.

    Other than that, a good prologue. Let's see where you go.

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    Wow! I had to take a cold shower.

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    I loved the line, "this is fun despite being destructive and aggressive to the ego"

    The story read like a believable conversation between children. I could see flecks of truth in them. Vampires are my favorite horror characters, so I appreciated the nod to Bela Legosi.

    Did you intend to use the work "...sick you dry in a flash"?

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    Thanks for the comments.

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    Contrasting thoughts and meanings of word play cleverly expresses the pain of a lost love. May a phoenix rise anew from these ashes and inspire greater passions.

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    Sometimes love is about building and rebuilding upon the ruins of the current or previous inhabitants of your heart, enigma explained. Well portrayed; bravo!

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    It is a part of my life if that's what you want to know. I've led a humorous life. My writings are full of true stories (color added for effect).

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    Hahaha I like this! Is this part of a larger story?

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    97 is the year life really picks up! Smile

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    This needs an editing, I agree with Don. Trust our audience, you don't have to write a descriptive of every step your character takes.

    some examples:
    Educed, should be induced.
    I don't think you need the line, he stood up from the chair.

    I'm intrigued by, "the hunt is on" line. I would love to have more dialogue as Don said. I would also love to have more thoughts from the character. I want to get a foundation of who the character is.

    Certainly appreciate the effort. It takes time, and practice. but you have the makings for it.

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    Forum: General Discussion

    Last post on thread was by Don Roble:

    PM me so I remember to do it. I write very short stories.

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    Forum: Help and Support

    Last post on thread was by Routh:

    I have applied a change to fix the file permissions. Avatars can be uploaded again.

    I am also closing and locking this thread as it is ancient. Please open new threads if there is nothing withing the last 90 days about an issue, as it is likely far from relevant anymore. The previous instances have nothing to do with each other, nor does this one.

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    Forum: Help and Support

    Last post on thread was by Routh:

    Luzzzifer wrote:

    @Luzzzifer - Hello!

    Maybe this is a stupid question, but...
    Can I add "chapters" in my stories? Like having different pages for them.
    If so, how do I do that?

    Thank you! Smile


    Hi @luzzifer - Chapters will be a feature coming back in Version 5, which I am still working on perfecting. I was in version 4 but the implementation was very bad.

    What I recommend you do is create a separate story post for each chapter and the same title. This way when someone looks at your profile they'll be able to see the chapters in order thanks to alphanumeric sorting.

    Example:

    This is My Great Story - Chapter 1

    If you have a chapter title you can add it to the description in bold italics or to the top of the chapter body.

    When the new version comes out, you'll be able to 'bind' these individual chapters into a novel, poetry book or other book type.

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    Last post on thread was by PseudoScribe:

    so don I might not have explained it right but i think i may need ghost artists if such a thing exists. I want to write the story and have illustrations made to compliment it

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    Forum: Help and Support

    Last post on thread was by XxDARKGHOSTZX9:

    Sir i had an extremely awful day at that time. My spouse was in the hospital, and my family member passed away and my twin brother passed on all in the same month. I am truly sorry for the way that i acted . I am normally not prone to such reactions. The fault was mine and i responded in anger due to my own circumstances.. I apologize sincerely and will use this site as a means to portray future literary work. As it stands, before i noticed your reply i had already updated one work on my profile earlier today. Please forgive and if there is any format or situation. That i can help with i would be more then happy too.

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    Last post on thread was by Routh:

    With the recent post flood that the site saw, I was made aware of some incorrect expectations of what specific pages are intended to be used for, and reminded of some of the issues on this version of the site.

    Firstly, the intended place to see the latest posts is the 'Latest Activity Feed', now featured with the link 'Latest Activity' in the main menu to clarify it's use. This view shows the latest 50 posts or more, and will concatenate multiple posts by one user to a single entry. This is the best and only place you should be using to 'catch up' from your last visit.

    The 'Newest' page in the Writings Archive (now renamed to Library) has been renamed to 'Newest to Oldest'. This page is a chronological archive view for searching through all posts by date, and it is not intended for users to use to catch up on posts. As such, post concatenation will never be used here. Not to mention that post concatenation is largely incompatible with pagination, and to try and do both cleanly and without error would make for a very slow page.

    Now, on the topic of the post flood, which has been discussed before here. The new version of the site will introduce the Karma system, which will be a point based system that will give users points for commenting, posting forum posts and rating writings, and deduct points for posting writings. New users will start with enough points for 2 posts, and old users will earn a score based on their history. This is intended to solve the biggest issue The Den faces in the 'social' era of the Internet, where users have become rather anti-social and post content expecting comments without participating on the site by doing so themselves. To be clear though, if a user has enough posts to post 30 writings at once, the Karma system will not prevent this, and never will. This will be handled via post concatenation in the feeds, which will prevent other users posts from being pushed off the feeds by mass posting. The Library pages however will never concatenate posts.

    Version 5 will also introduce the concept of 'following' a writer. So if you want to ensure you never miss posts by your favourite writers, you will be able to follow them and you will have a dedicated 'following' feed to just these users posts and activity.

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    Last post on thread was by Routh:

    Update:

    I stand corrected, gender was part of v4 and not v3, and v3 did allow me to remove birthdate. So that field and all it's data have been removed from user profiles and the database.

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    Last post on thread was by Loothier:

    About ten, maybe even fifteen years ago, when the Internet was still young, I chanced upon an amateur author's website. I spent many nights reading his stories about the ever-diminishing possibilities of science caused by more-dimensional beings squeezed into our world, and the immortal lady (created accidentally in some scientific experiment) struggling to keep the human race alive through the eons, storing knowledge in the roughest form possible as the universe kept loosing detail. Another story was about superheroes that got exponentially more powerful, and more deranged, each time a new one was turned, and the previous people who tried to stop the next ones. Around the tragic time I lost the bookmark, he was writing about magic (which worked like programming with math inside the mind) used to engineer some parts in a space shuttle that exploded. His website had yellow text on a dark gray blue background, if I remember correctly. He did occasional rant posts on science and programming subjects too.

    I would very much like to read those stories again. Does someone on this forum know the author or his website? Or a better place to ask?

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    Forum: The Editor's Desk

    Last post on thread was by chancematthews01:

    I am a new amateur writer. I have book one already posted. I would really like help with editing. Do a Search for "Chi Warrior Saga - Book 1"

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    Last post on thread was by Phillip Cain:

    Hello all. Subject is pretty straight forward. I have been considering a switch in majors at my local community college into creative writing or something close to it (not even fully aware of my options yet to be honest), but I would like to know how it happened for you. Was it an epiphany moment, something you fell into, or something that was always present in you.

    edit: it really labels me an ink virgin lol, what a knee slapper

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    Last post on thread was by Rob Kosy:

    Now that's a proper critique and hard, fair and good advice.

    The one draw back for me about E-books, Kindle & such is that 'anyone' can publish. For example there's a guy who puts out fabulous, professional covers and calls himself Stephen King. The type face is even similar, very much similar, in-fact. But he is not the Stephen King. a fact that is painfully evident once you start suffering......I mean reading.

    There are also some excellent stories and ideas but the writing is not to the standard you would expect.

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    Forum: Help and Support

    Last post on thread was by Kore-rupt Kay-os:

    How do I post my writing?

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    Forum: Help and Support

    Last post on thread was by Nurwanti:

    I also have the same question, thanks for asking

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    Forum: Songwriter's Studio

    Last post on thread was by Nurwanti:

    lol worth to try Grin

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    Forum: Bug Reports and Site Issues

    Last post on thread was by Routh:

    This should not be an issue anymore.

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    Forum: General Discussion

    Last post on thread was by Routh:

    This short post has some quick and easy ways to improve your writing.

    https://medium.com/an-idea-for-you/the-two-minutes-it-takes-to-read-this-will-improve-your-writing-forever-82a7d01441d1#.vr45txmxo

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    Forum: Off Topics

    Last post on thread was by SirSludge:

    It's been years and now it's back
    we got the counting in the sack

    Now in this fort
    there is a court
    but you do not sue
    because it's 22!
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    .
    .
    No, that's not right!
    The numbers aren't tight
    I don't want to be a bore,
    but I tell you, it's 54!

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    Forum: General Discussion

    Last post on thread was by Don Roble:

    Forget original. The last original idea was Jules Verne.

    Write what you want. Write it as well as you can. If you post it, someone will read and comment. It sometimes takes a week or so. You will get the unvarnished truth. There's certain rules that never change in writing. Opinions as to the story or whatever you write is just an opinion. Never, never take it personally. Personal stuff will be deleted.

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    Last post on thread was by Don Roble:

    If the narrator is unable to hear it you can't tell it. Write the one side to be obvious in what is being said.

    "You were hit by a rock?"
    "Twenty-two stitches! Wow!"

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    Forum: General Discussion

    Last post on thread was by Don Roble:

    I don't know where to start answering this question.

    Look around the net for basic writing. That's a start.

    I would skip that and write. The primary thing is to tell a story. Don't try to tell it like anyone but yourself. Don't rush things. Writing takes time. read your own words as you start each writing session. Keep the pace even.

    Check your spelling. Check your grammar. Read it out loud. Does it sound right?

    Don't look too far ahead unless you have an outline of what you want to achieve.

    There are other things to do but this is a start.

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    Last post on thread was by trubolotta:

    Just a few suggestions from someone who has done a lot of technical writing but now wants to do SciFi writing.

    1. 1. Set up a crib sheet of people (or entities), places and things with descriptions to help you be consistent throughout the story. You don't have to reveal all detail at one time, but being consistent over a period of time helps readers.
    2. 2. I write a plot outline and sometimes three, four or five. Some interconnect, some do not. Some I dump and some I polish. It doesn't take long and can be very generalized using your own brand of shorthand.
    3. 3. Work your chapters. I'll rewrite, chop and mince a chapter as much as necessary until it reads and fits the way I want it to read and fit. I've even scrapped entire chapters, salvaging only a few good parts and dropping the rest.
    4. 4. Ideas sheet - its a document I always keep to paste in ideas I think were good but just in the wrong place in the story.
    5. 5. Finally, don't take my word for it. I'm brand new at fiction writing and I'm sure more experienced writers can give you good advice.

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    Forum: General Discussion

    Last post on thread was by Routh:

    I will hopefully have this implemented before too long along with a new version of the site. It's currently a work in progress, about halfway done.

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    Forum: General Discussion

    Last post on thread was by flickeringfairy:

    There have been some in the past and some that dabble in a little bit of everything.

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    Forum: General Discussion

    Last post on thread was by Demonic:

    I'd love to check it out. I'm kind of in the same boat as you, writing a story but don't have all of it worked out yet. I'll have to check out chapter one. Smile

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    Forum: General Discussion

    Last post on thread was by Kholm:

    I read once that military folk are somewhere around 90% more likely to smoke then non military. Now don't mistake that for 90% of military people smoke, but there are a lot who do.

    Sometimes there is more to smoking than just the physical effects or the buzz it gives you. As military, I can tell you that the social aspect of smoking (at least in military settings) is something that is very important. Its quite a tradeoff, your health for an abundance of rumours and information. The smoke deck is one of the most useful places to obtain information between divisions and get group collaberations.

    Non smokers actually look to the smokers to see if they can "get any information on the smokedeck." While much of it is rumor, the senior smokers are pretty good at weeding out nonsense.

    Now, enough of the specific social aspect that makes it seem acceptable to me.

    Smoking is bad. Bad bad bad bad. There are tons of cancer causing bits, killing you slowly bits, and bits of well smoke. That crap doesnt need to be in your lungs one bit. But hey, its enjoyable to some extent. It does give you a little buzz, and it does fire off little feel goods in your brain. I am no scientest or doctor so I wont pretend to know what does what or why it is addictive.

    It can be a money dump, health dump and give you chronically bad breath.

    But for every evil, you just have to know how to properly keep yourself. If you smoke, maybe you should make sure to jog every day, brush your teeth twice as long, and eat a bit healthier. I know I do to try and offset the habit. plus I have to be in tip top shape for most of what I do.

    Smoking all comes down to where you are, who you are and how you choose to do it. Hell, it might be a cop-out as some people say when life gets a bit too stressful, but here I am in japan, right after a huge mess. I'm alive, and I've been working 14 hours a day to restore power to several buildings, and helping people in wreckage. Its hard, I'm stressed, and I'll be damned if you tell me I can't have a cig. Wink

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    Forum: General Discussion

    Last post on thread was by Rob Kosy:

    Ah, but I'll bet you were only 6 when you invented this word-fuelled Porsche of a site. in many ways, Chris, I liken you to Matthew Broderick in the movie 'War Games'. Y'know, when he hacks the USA's national defence system and gets to ask Stephen Hawking's 'Speak & Spell' for a game of Thermo Nuclear War? No?
    Ah, well, maybe there is too much 80's in this reply, even for you.
    But, seriously, Chris, a great achievement, my friend: standards high, membership big and not to mention the atmosphere this place generates.
    Here's to 19 more.

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    Forum: Storyteller's Fire

    Last post on thread was by Dcouch87:

    I'm sure this is a large response, but I'm new here having just joined. I'd have to agree with the comments I've read however. As you write and go back over things you have previously written, you'll reorganize certain things, edit some things out, and change as you go. Don't worry about surviving chapters early on. Write some, then go back and reread it after a little time. You'll find the appropriate pauses to divide into chapters then. I wrote nearly 15,000 words within 3 chapters. Then when I went back a few days later while typing it from my writing, I realized one chapter could actually be two separate ones.

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    Forum: Storyteller's Fire

    Last post on thread was by Dcouch87:

    So I'm writing a historical fiction that takes place during world war 2. It follows the younger of two brothers throughout the war during his search for his older brother that was shot down over Europe. The younger enlists several months after his older brother, just after pearl harbor. He gets sent to the Pacific where he is wounded, then he volunteers for the rangers after he learns of his brother being a pow. My question is, should I add a love interest in the younger brothers life? I have added a way to do so if I choose to, but not sure how to follow. He has just finished his ranger training and is home on leave before being sent to England.

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    Forum: Announcements

    Last post on thread was by Routh:

    Stage 1 of this update, deploying SSL has been completed. All pages should show secure in your browsers and Chrome should report that it is using a "modern cipher suite".

    I believe I have found all instances of "mixed insecure content" which usually means an image is being loaded with HTTP instead of HTTPS. I may have missed one or two. Please notify me if you find any by replying to this post.

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    Forum: General Discussion

    Last post on thread was by Don Roble:

    You're in the right place. Any genre works here.
    As for critiques, the ones you get won't be- That's nice. It might be - That's nice because. There may be a but there too.
    You also will get critiqued on grammar and spelling. You will know if your plot makes sense, not if it's any good; that's up to you.
    To sum up- yea, this is the right place.

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    Forum: General Discussion

    Last post on thread was by Rob Kosy:

    Mr Cushions, please receive my cyber hug along with a massive apology for such a delayed reply.
    I myself am fine and hoping that you and yours are in a similar fettle.
    Time is a meagre mistress at the moment and, would you believe, I have written nothing (accept cheques) since this post; lots of family stuff going on . My mam, though not ill, isn't in the best of conditions physically and requires a lot more help than just twelve months ago. Stick that in the pot with a new management regime at work, allow to simmer for twelve months and out comes the best time/stress sandwich you could ever hope to feast upon. At last count the number of unpaid, extra, hours I have bagged at my place of employ totals three weeks. Blimey, with 21 days of uninterrupted writing I could have finished 'the herrings' and cornered the weird/slightly uncomfortable comedy market.
    But enough that, onward and upwards as pompous, upper class knobs like to say.
    Many thanks for your response to my "Sir Terry" post. I really was gutted at his passing. But since we have our very own 'Savage Pratchet' here on the den, his style (unwittingly echoed by your talented self) shall live on.
    As for the election, you were right, Mr Cushions. the herrings were secreting a few creative juices. However, I have been unable to absorb and act upon them because of said time constraints. having said that David Macaroon has enjoyed a few scribbled notes upon the back of work memos and wage slips. Though I call him David Car Moron, since he obviously a cap driver since we never see him........driving.
    Blimey, this is the longest time I've spent on the den all year.
    Merry Christmas, savage. I hope you and yours have an excellent one and enjoy a fantastic new year.

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    Forum: The Editor's Desk

    Last post on thread was by Don Roble:

    You are using the italics as thoughts. No punctuation is needed or correct.
    How am I alive? This is correct.

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    Forum: Storyteller's Fire

    Last post on thread was by hobie roberts:

    hey so i got an idea for a short story series and i kinda need help with like cover designs and stuff. my idea is for it to be a zombie book, but like through the zombies eyes, ive been thinking about it for a while and finally got some ideas for the actual plot of it, if any one would like to help with it ill give you my Skype, mostly i really need some one who can draw zombies pretty good for a cover of it, ill be printing it at my sisters work and making like short story's, plus my local book store said if they like it they can start to maby promote it there, ill also have it online to.

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    Forum: General Discussion

    Last post on thread was by Routh:

    Found this on Google+ today. Its worth reading and putting into practice.

    lh6.googleusercontent.com/-yJbinKsvtBY/VeloUk4lsDI/AAAAAAAAmCQ/S1t3xbMOp_k/w636-h641-no/dhw-provost.png

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    Forum: General Discussion

    Last post on thread was by mcglone:

    Because I started off here and have deep respect for this website, I am writing this here.

    I have finished my book (finally) but I need an outside view to check if everything is up to scratch. This only just dawned on me when I set my book up on Amazon as a pre-order title.

    So, if anyone is willing to help I'd be greatful and I will even give you a complimentary copy of the the final book!

    I hope you guys don't mind me posting this here.

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    Forum: The Editor's Desk

    Last post on thread was by mcglone:

    Because I started off here and have deep respect for this website, I am writing this here.

    I have finished my book (finally) but I need an outside view to check if everything is up to scratch. This only just dawned on me when I set my book up on Amazon as a pre-order title.

    So, if anyone is willing to help I'd be greatful and I will even give you a complimentary copy of the the final book!

    I hope you guys don't mind me posting this here.

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    Forum: The Editor's Desk

    Last post on thread was by Routh:

    Heads up for those of you publishing to Amazon. Amazon is looking to change their pay model so you only get paid for pages read.

    http://www.telegraph.co.uk/technology...-read.html

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    Forum: The Editor's Desk

    Last post on thread was by Don Roble:

    Gay lit sells well at Amazon.

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    Forum: Storyteller's Fire

    Last post on thread was by Vollkrasser:

    Hi,

    I made a script/plot for new cases in the traditional style of Sir Arthur Conan Doyle"™s stories of Sherlock Holmes and Dr. Watson. That script is the basis for a non-commercial online adventure game version.

    The first previews of the game are"¦

    ...here in video https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=LGY4thv8wG0

    ...here pics with the final lightning, scroll down in the forum, the last post on page 1 forum

    ...here is the first scene playable online (graphics there are just placeholdeers and will be replaced):
    http://textadventures.co.uk/games/vie...n-of-sheba

    The game ought to be in British English, best would be the old Victorian style of Sir Arthur Conan Doyle. I"™m not a native English speaker, and it would be a sacrilege to have even the slightest foreign accent for this. That would be German in my case, which is reserved for the villains already ;-)

    So I"™m looking for a writer, who would like to take part in this project for free as I also do.
    The workflow would be that he/she starts from my bad English script and writes a nice round story out of it that can then be the novel part of the adventure. Think of it as a bit like Dr. Watson did with the bare facts of Holmes: he made entertaining and exciting stories out of it. It would be similar with our cooperation for the adventure.

    Best would be if the writer speaks a bit german, but it"™s not a must.
    The final game will be free and online playable by everybody even without registration on the above platform.

    The game is afoot!

    If youre interested, just contact me via e-mail, which is described in 2 parts (to avoid-auto spam crawlers):
    the first part is
    reinarassa
    the second part is
    @googlemail.com
    combine the two and you have the valid e-mail.

    Best regards from germany/Bavaria!

    Vollkrasser

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    Forum: The Editor's Desk

    Last post on thread was by Routh:

    This latest question should be posted into a new topic. Please use one thread per topic. Multiple topics in one thread is too difficult for people to follow and destroys a thread.

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    Forum: Bug Reports and Site Issues

    Last post on thread was by Routh:

    NovaCops writing has been fixed.

    Thats all the reported work for now, please report any others.

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    Forum: General Discussion

    Last post on thread was by Don Roble:

    This sounds like you want to write this in the style of "The Seven Samurai's". You can find a short summary of it online. It tells about seven men who saw the same thing and told the story differently.

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    Forum: Storyteller's Fire

    Last post on thread was by LawMatheson:

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    Vermithrax wrote:

    The Chronicles are 144,000 words long, and took me the better part of fifteen years to get right.

    I can't seem to write anything of less than 5000 words, and they tend to get away from me.

    Don't know why this is; I think I just get caught up in the story.

    At the moment, a chapter will take me about two -three days, with re-reads, and re-writes.




    I get what you mean when you say you get caught up in a story, for me, it's almost like 'The DOSCO Files' are writing themselves. I have One chapter posted here, but I have three books worth of material. I am just going back and smoothing things out. I am struggling with word count and pages in a chapter, so this post was helpful.

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    Forum: General Discussion

    Last post on thread was by pirate60:

    lol.

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    Forum: Storyteller's Fire

    Last post on thread was by blue_veined_hatred:

    I was busy doing the usual, laying back inside my cruiser and helping myself to more doughnuts every now and then, with an eye on the street. For most of the cops back at the station passing the night in a cruiser is something they would skip as often as they can manage. I was not most of the cops. Most of the cops do not have a marriage on the verge of dissolving into the most sour taste.
    Rankton was as quite at that hour of the night. Quite enough for the rapidly approaching engine noise of a car revving up the road. I tossed back the half eaten doughnut into it's box and fumbled up to a feasible position.
    I hardly recognized the brand of the car which fleetingly shot past the street but I clearly recognized the situation: a speeding case deep at night. This mght range from some adventure hungry delinquent to some high profile hit and run. Just at that moment, my radio cackled out:
    "All units in the vicinity. A possible hit and run suspect has been seen going East found down Rosewood Boulevard. Suspect is driving a black Classic Ford Mustang. Requesting reports on visual."
    "This is Z3005.I have a visual of a possible suspect. On pursuit."
    I turned on the ignition and the on the lights, wailed the siren and zoomed out of the alley. Tonight is going to be a bumpy.

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    Forum: General Discussion

    Last post on thread was by Rob Kosy:

    It has been pointed out on a few occasions that summer is slow, and it's true.

    I'm not getting a lot of time to visit at the moment either (though I wish it was because I was strolling & having fun outdoors, rather than being hemmed in at work; the holiday season, eh?).

    kt, without disparaging Verm, Kerri & co I would say that you are the den's most consistent & revered critic. A 'good one' from yourself is an all day high. But the den without kt (at least in my time here) is akin to tea without water.

    Looking forward to the resolution of your posting troubles.

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    Forum: General Discussion

    Last post on thread was by tjwell01:

    I agree e-publishing is tricky--I was just pointing out the cool feature about the site. Plus, I'm always on the look out for the new writing community.

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    Forum: Suggestions and Feature Requests

    Last post on thread was by flickeringfairy:

    I was wondering if it would be possible to not only search for type, but order them as well. In other words search "Poems" and then order from newest to oldest.

    Just a thought,
    FlickeringFairy

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    Forum: Poet's Corner

    Last post on thread was by tjwell01:

    Poetry becomes a different animal when read aloud. It takes shape and new meaning before your eyes. SAY IT!

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    Forum: General Discussion

    Last post on thread was by Vermithrax:

    A very warm (re)welcome from England, mister Bolger. Smile

    It's wonderful to hear from you, and great to know that you are back.