You make an excellent comment on your writing. Well done.

Nicely done, Don.

Cowardice? I think not. Practical would be the word I would use.

lol Very good Dan. I would not want to live like that, though. The heat would drive me nuts.

I like this. A quite true observation. You celebrate the small, day-to-day victories.

It does the trick, Kt.

I'm just trying not to overwhelm readers with how much I've got done. Also thank you for the website I have it bookmarked now.

I wish it were mine. It's moodyt's

A wall of words defeats itself. I will read something but I won't work ar it.

Find some kind of opening. It doesn't have to be a big deal, just something to attract interest.

Go to Grammarly. It isn't perfect but will help with things we read past. Everyone writes that way.
Try https://thecriticalreader.com/complete-sat-grammar-rules/ It is excellent.

Writing is always a work in progress. The way to learn to write well is to write a lot. Keep this story going and post it.

lol How true, Don. The game shows are crazy, except for Jeopardy. But, please, never go to a game show in Japan. They are even crazier then we are.

This is a bit intense. But your reasoning is impeccable. Well done.

" ... and I felt bad for the little puppy because he was held from this joy because had a fear of strangers. " You have way to much usage of the word "because," and this sentence is a good example. Try something like this: " ... and I felt bad for the little puppy because he was held from this joy. He had fear of strangers."

You just need a good grammatical clean-up here. You have a good tale here, nicely done. Just do a bit of hard editing.

Very good, Don. Nicely done.

Don is correct. There is a good argument buried in there. You need to order it logically and break it into paragraphs.

Poetry is getting very profound lately. Maybe we need to lighten it up with limericks.

Anyhow, good job. I liked it.

lmao. You are right, Don. Cable is the bottom of the barrel. Some of those shows are absolutely pathetic.

Good job!

Amen, my friend. However, I have never tried to cut a lemon with scissors. It seems it would be quite difficult and impractical.
Peace.

Well, Don, let me say first it is great to have you back. Now, to your poem.

What a marvelous writing! It is a great piece of introspection!

You know, when we get older, all we really have is our history and our memories. It is good to feel repentant for our errors. But we also have to feel joyous about the good things that happened in our life. Dont forget about that.

Okay, thank you!

did I put in too many then?

Paragraphs are like little stories. A paragraph is about one idea. A new idea= new paragraph.

You need to make more paragraphs. You have made this hard to read.

Thank you.

Thank you kt! I hope you are doing well!

Really nice I like it

Dogs are amazing pets thank you for this!

I really like this I can actually relate to this quite a bit

I really did always like your writing even when I was Mzhyper

Things have gotten so extreme there's barely any boundaries that haven't already been crossed for cable. They are clearly out of ideas. Guess I'll go back to watching people eat ice cubes on youtube... that really gets the blood pumping!
lol

Hahaha! I like it!

Learn to use paragraphs.

You are all over the place. Pick one hypothesis and stick to it.

Check your grammar. (I use Grammarly).

Do or not make no worries

Double negative.

Trying too hard to get a rhyme.

Thanks, buddy.

I find this quite lovely. It really brings back some memories for me. Very good!

Witchcraft 101? Very good!

I found this one a bit scary. Well done!

Really nice imagery. You do an excellent job of capturing the craziness of a busy train depot.

Oh, my! A really tragic ending. I am happy things did not turn out that way.

"I sit, among the harmonic symphony of coffee and cigarettes, across from Inspiration himself." - What a marvelous sentence!

How true this is!

A beautiful composition.

Very good. Superb imagery.

Very good! Nicely written! There is some real feeling here.

Oh wow. Excellent. Really fighting back against this tragic and debilitating disease. Nicely done.

Very well done. As a sixty-nine year old, I have experienced some of the feelings. Nice job.

Wow! This is quite profound. And it is beautifully written.

Welcome to the Dark Web. There is one thing, however, that Max does not grasp. Hackers prize stealth and secrecy. They never reveal themselves to anyone.

Good job.

You need a good editing here. For instance, a sentence always begins in upper case.

I can understand what point you are trying to make here. I would restructure this, using language that is less emotional and more formal. And I would present it in a logical order.

Quite good. I particularly enjoyed the reference to body motion while speaking. When I was a boy, people used to ask the question, "How do you get an Italian to stop speaking?" The proper answer, of course, was "Tie their hands."

Forum: General Discussion

Last post on thread was by Don Roble:

My writing changed when I got serious about others reading it. It also improved as I went along. People criticizing it really helps.

Forum: Help and Support

Last post on thread was by Routh:

Sorry I missed this. Yeah I sometimes see this as well. It seems to be a YMMV situation and I can't track it down on v3.

It doesn't affect v5, which is nearing completion. I'm wrapping up subscription/notifications feature for v5 this weekend and adding in private messages, and then there's only one feature left for v5 (the karma system) before it can be launched.

At this point I'm trying to avoid putting any work into v3 as it just makes v5 take longer to be ready.

Forum: Storyteller's Fire

Last post on thread was by Mythbhavd:

Many of his works, both in Sci-fi and in fantasy, include elements of poetry and music. In later years, he married an opera singer and actually wrote a series around a character who is much like his wife. The series, The Sorceress Soprano, tracks a woman who is from earth who ends up on another world in which music plays a major role. He takes a unique approach to both sci-fi and fantasy in which he works in elements of poetry and song, economics and ecology, and political struggles that all have an impact on his characters.

Overall, though, I agreed with his look at poetry. There has been a large move away from meter and rhyme and into more of a free form prose type of poetry. Prose is great, but it seems like people want to make prose fit other forms of poetry and, unless done very well, it takes away from the artistry. And, I have to ask, "what are we losing?"

Forum: Storyteller's Fire

Last post on thread was by Mythbhavd:

I'd agree that Oates' story falls more under the heading of prose. I think the purpose of micro-stories is to create a story in the mind of the reader. In the way that I'm using them in a clinical setting is to start a conversation. So, some of the stories are more like parables or moral stories, some are just short thoughtful moments, and some are designed to give you a view of a character or two within a story and see what people think.

In some instances, though, there is an entire story wrapped up in a statement. The story doesn't need to be elaborated. I think we often do this in our day to day lives.
"How are you doing?"
"It has been a day."
There is an entire story wrapped up in that statement. We don't see it, but the speaker knows all of the story. It's an interesting idea.

Forum: Reviewer's Ramble

Last post on thread was by Mythbhavd:

I'll agree. This was one of his best works and I think it was because of the honesty around his own experience. Similarly, I saw the same in Magic Kingdom for Sale: SOLD by Terry Brooks. It was written at the suggestion of his publisher and friend while he was dealing with his struggle in trying to decide what to do about his legal practice and his writing.

Forum: v5 Testing

Last post on thread was by Routh:

Post weekend update report for v5:

Features completed:

- Email verification workflow

Bugs fixed:

- User last seen time not updating

New policies implemented (Important for admins to know):

- Unverified accounts will be removed after 14 days
- Accounts that have not submitted a writing, comment or discussion after 1 year (365 days) will be automatically removed as stale. Shouts, Private Messages, or post reactions will not count as contributions.


On the last policy, I've wanted to add this for some time. This will ensure that all members on the site older than 1 year have contributed to the community in some meaningful way.

Forum: Help and Support

Last post on thread was by Routh:

Hi Don,

I hate doing this publicly but as it seems you do not receive/read my emails I will simply put a note here.

Your account has not been modified or disabled or banned or anything else. I don't do that. I never have.

The password you believe to be yours, is not. I verified this when KT passed the credentials that do not work to me.

The only thing required was a password reset.

For over a month however, your provider, AT&T/Bellsouth, was blocking emails from The Den's mail server. So I could not email you, and password reset would not have worked. That has since been resolved, however it is likely they are still marking it as spam.

Reluctantly (because setting a users password for them is BAD security and I prefer to use any other method when possible) - I manually reset your password and sent the verified, working credentials, to KT and he has forwarded them to you. That happened two weeks ago.

There are no problems with your account, you should be able to login.

Forum: v5 Testing

Last post on thread was by Routh:

With the decision to abolish ratings with v5, I've been pondering a new way to allow great work to be highlighted on The Den.

While I admit some similarities to a 'Like' system, which I'm not much of a fan of; I will be developing a favourites system for the site. Users will be able to favourite works and then rank them on a list on their profile. Writings lists will have ways to sort writings by the number of favourites, allowing people to find some of the best submissions.

We have over 20 years of work here and while new submissions are always the top priority, being able to find great and inspiring work to read keeps new members engaged.

Forum: v5 Testing

Last post on thread was by Routh:

I accidentally deleted both copies of Don's response, which was that they should go altogether. I've spoken with a few members and I think the consensus is that they should go. I'll come up with another way for older writings to be highlighted.

Forum: General Discussion

Last post on thread was by Routh:

Honestly.. I've seen stupid UX decisions before but this takes the cake.



Today I learned that that very ambiguous delete button beside a post DOES NOT delete the post.. IT DELETES THE USER.

*slow clap* --- good job PHP-Fusion devs..

Honestly I cannot finish Version 5 fast enough.

Forum: General Discussion

Last post on thread was by Routh:

Hey folks,

With v5 I am modernizing The Den to bring it up to snuff with the types of sites you use daily nowadays. I have thought of a number features to bring in, and I am wondering...

If you could have anything you wanted in the next version of The Den, what would it be?

Forum: v5 Testing

Last post on thread was by Routh:

Hi kt6550, Madhatter and Don,

I finally realized what the issue was with the connection of v5.

The short version: There was a routing issue, and it's been fixed. You should be able to access the site consistently now.

The longer version for the curious:

I have two IP addresses coming into my house for webpage testing and general system testing as I work in IT. Unfortunately when requests came in for the site, they would sometimes return from the second IP instead of the first. When your computer receives a reply from a different IP than it sent the request to, it drops the response and ignores it as invalid. This was causing the issue. I have a solution that will allow me to fix this in the form of a different internet provider, however that will take a couple of weeks, so for now I have disabled on IP so traffic can only flow through one of them, which will prevent the issue from happening.

Forum: General Discussion

Last post on thread was by bbcool36:

Hoping to meet another short story writer. I am pretty new to story writing, looking for someone who could critique stories for me and I could do the same in exchange. The story I have finished is about 8000 words, so it's a little longer. I have another in progress. Just let me know in the thread!!!

Forum: Help and Support

Last post on thread was by Routh:

I have applied a change to fix the file permissions. Avatars can be uploaded again.

I am also closing and locking this thread as it is ancient. Please open new threads if there is nothing withing the last 90 days about an issue, as it is likely far from relevant anymore. The previous instances have nothing to do with each other, nor does this one.

Forum: Help and Support

Last post on thread was by Routh:

Hi @luzzifer - Chapters will be a feature coming back in Version 5, which I am still working on perfecting. I was in version 4 but the implementation was very bad.

What I recommend you do is create a separate story post for each chapter and the same title. This way when someone looks at your profile they'll be able to see the chapters in order thanks to alphanumeric sorting.

Example:

This is My Great Story - Chapter 1

If you have a chapter title you can add it to the description in bold italics or to the top of the chapter body.

When the new version comes out, you'll be able to 'bind' these individual chapters into a novel, poetry book or other book type.

Forum: General Discussion

Last post on thread was by PseudoScribe:

so don I might not have explained it right but i think i may need ghost artists if such a thing exists. I want to write the story and have illustrations made to compliment it

Forum: Help and Support

Last post on thread was by XxDARKGHOSTZX9:

Sir i had an extremely awful day at that time. My spouse was in the hospital, and my family member passed away and my twin brother passed on all in the same month. I am truly sorry for the way that i acted . I am normally not prone to such reactions. The fault was mine and i responded in anger due to my own circumstances.. I apologize sincerely and will use this site as a means to portray future literary work. As it stands, before i noticed your reply i had already updated one work on my profile earlier today. Please forgive and if there is any format or situation. That i can help with i would be more then happy too.

Forum: General Discussion

Last post on thread was by Routh:

With the recent post flood that the site saw, I was made aware of some incorrect expectations of what specific pages are intended to be used for, and reminded of some of the issues on this version of the site.

Firstly, the intended place to see the latest posts is the 'Latest Activity Feed', now featured with the link 'Latest Activity' in the main menu to clarify it's use. This view shows the latest 50 posts or more, and will concatenate multiple posts by one user to a single entry. This is the best and only place you should be using to 'catch up' from your last visit.

The 'Newest' page in the Writings Archive (now renamed to Library) has been renamed to 'Newest to Oldest'. This page is a chronological archive view for searching through all posts by date, and it is not intended for users to use to catch up on posts. As such, post concatenation will never be used here. Not to mention that post concatenation is largely incompatible with pagination, and to try and do both cleanly and without error would make for a very slow page.

Now, on the topic of the post flood, which has been discussed before here. The new version of the site will introduce the Karma system, which will be a point based system that will give users points for commenting, posting forum posts and rating writings, and deduct points for posting writings. New users will start with enough points for 2 posts, and old users will earn a score based on their history. This is intended to solve the biggest issue The Den faces in the 'social' era of the Internet, where users have become rather anti-social and post content expecting comments without participating on the site by doing so themselves. To be clear though, if a user has enough posts to post 30 writings at once, the Karma system will not prevent this, and never will. This will be handled via post concatenation in the feeds, which will prevent other users posts from being pushed off the feeds by mass posting. The Library pages however will never concatenate posts.

Version 5 will also introduce the concept of 'following' a writer. So if you want to ensure you never miss posts by your favourite writers, you will be able to follow them and you will have a dedicated 'following' feed to just these users posts and activity.

Forum: Announcements

Last post on thread was by Routh:

Update:

I stand corrected, gender was part of v4 and not v3, and v3 did allow me to remove birthdate. So that field and all it's data have been removed from user profiles and the database.

Forum: General Discussion

Last post on thread was by Loothier:

About ten, maybe even fifteen years ago, when the Internet was still young, I chanced upon an amateur author's website. I spent many nights reading his stories about the ever-diminishing possibilities of science caused by more-dimensional beings squeezed into our world, and the immortal lady (created accidentally in some scientific experiment) struggling to keep the human race alive through the eons, storing knowledge in the roughest form possible as the universe kept loosing detail. Another story was about superheroes that got exponentially more powerful, and more deranged, each time a new one was turned, and the previous people who tried to stop the next ones. Around the tragic time I lost the bookmark, he was writing about magic (which worked like programming with math inside the mind) used to engineer some parts in a space shuttle that exploded. His website had yellow text on a dark gray blue background, if I remember correctly. He did occasional rant posts on science and programming subjects too.

I would very much like to read those stories again. Does someone on this forum know the author or his website? Or a better place to ask?

Forum: The Editor's Desk

Last post on thread was by chancematthews01:

I am a new amateur writer. I have book one already posted. I would really like help with editing. Do a Search for "Chi Warrior Saga - Book 1"

Forum: General Discussion

Last post on thread was by Phillip Cain:

Hello all. Subject is pretty straight forward. I have been considering a switch in majors at my local community college into creative writing or something close to it (not even fully aware of my options yet to be honest), but I would like to know how it happened for you. Was it an epiphany moment, something you fell into, or something that was always present in you.

edit: it really labels me an ink virgin lol, what a knee slapper

Forum: General Discussion

Last post on thread was by Rob Kosy:

Now that's a proper critique and hard, fair and good advice.

The one draw back for me about E-books, Kindle & such is that 'anyone' can publish. For example there's a guy who puts out fabulous, professional covers and calls himself Stephen King. The type face is even similar, very much similar, in-fact. But he is not the Stephen King. a fact that is painfully evident once you start suffering......I mean reading.

There are also some excellent stories and ideas but the writing is not to the standard you would expect.

Forum: Help and Support

Last post on thread was by Kore-rupt Kay-os:

How do I post my writing?

Forum: Help and Support

Last post on thread was by Nurwanti:

I also have the same question, thanks for asking

Forum: Bug Reports and Site Issues

Last post on thread was by Routh:

This should not be an issue anymore.

Forum: General Discussion

Last post on thread was by Routh:

This short post has some quick and easy ways to improve your writing.

https://medium.com/an-idea-for-you/the-two-minutes-it-takes-to-read-this-will-improve-your-writing-forever-82a7d01441d1#.vr45txmxo

Forum: Off Topic

Last post on thread was by SirSludge:

It's been years and now it's back
we got the counting in the sack

Now in this fort
there is a court
but you do not sue
because it's 22!
.
.
.
No, that's not right!
The numbers aren't tight
I don't want to be a bore,
but I tell you, it's 54!

Forum: General Discussion

Last post on thread was by lichtyd:

I've been writing for several months. Started with fan fiction and have started my own, not very original, story. I'll try to be an active member here, but my writing takes most of my free time. My first story, The Farmer's Daughter, is rather simple and derivative. Heck the title is a cliche. Writing with a familiar plot allows me to focus on grammar, style, dialog and narrative. I like my characters and enjoy putting them into scenes and recording how they react.

lichtyd

Forum: General Discussion

Last post on thread was by enchantedpickles:

Is there a certain why to do this or does it matter how your writing style is?

I want to write dialog of someone talking on the phone but my narator can only hear the person she is with and not the person on the phone.

Forum: General Discussion

Last post on thread was by pappz24:

I am new to writing.I like to pen the stories that come up in my mind but i always find difficult to get the right words.
Could someone please help me with the basics of writing.

Forum: General Discussion

Last post on thread was by trubolotta:

Just a few suggestions from someone who has done a lot of technical writing but now wants to do SciFi writing.

1. 1. Set up a crib sheet of people (or entities), places and things with descriptions to help you be consistent throughout the story. You don't have to reveal all detail at one time, but being consistent over a period of time helps readers.
2. 2. I write a plot outline and sometimes three, four or five. Some interconnect, some do not. Some I dump and some I polish. It doesn't take long and can be very generalized using your own brand of shorthand.
3. 3. Work your chapters. I'll rewrite, chop and mince a chapter as much as necessary until it reads and fits the way I want it to read and fit. I've even scrapped entire chapters, salvaging only a few good parts and dropping the rest.
4. 4. Ideas sheet - its a document I always keep to paste in ideas I think were good but just in the wrong place in the story.
5. 5. Finally, don't take my word for it. I'm brand new at fiction writing and I'm sure more experienced writers can give you good advice.

Forum: General Discussion

Last post on thread was by Routh:

I will hopefully have this implemented before too long along with a new version of the site. It's currently a work in progress, about halfway done.

Forum: General Discussion

Last post on thread was by flickeringfairy:

There have been some in the past and some that dabble in a little bit of everything.

Forum: General Discussion

Last post on thread was by Demonic:

I'd love to check it out. I'm kind of in the same boat as you, writing a story but don't have all of it worked out yet. I'll have to check out chapter one.

Forum: General Discussion

Last post on thread was by Kholm:

I read once that military folk are somewhere around 90% more likely to smoke then non military. Now don't mistake that for 90% of military people smoke, but there are a lot who do.

Sometimes there is more to smoking than just the physical effects or the buzz it gives you. As military, I can tell you that the social aspect of smoking (at least in military settings) is something that is very important. Its quite a tradeoff, your health for an abundance of rumours and information. The smoke deck is one of the most useful places to obtain information between divisions and get group collaberations.

Non smokers actually look to the smokers to see if they can "get any information on the smokedeck." While much of it is rumor, the senior smokers are pretty good at weeding out nonsense.

Now, enough of the specific social aspect that makes it seem acceptable to me.

Smoking is bad. Bad bad bad bad. There are tons of cancer causing bits, killing you slowly bits, and bits of well smoke. That crap doesnt need to be in your lungs one bit. But hey, its enjoyable to some extent. It does give you a little buzz, and it does fire off little feel goods in your brain. I am no scientest or doctor so I wont pretend to know what does what or why it is addictive.

It can be a money dump, health dump and give you chronically bad breath.

But for every evil, you just have to know how to properly keep yourself. If you smoke, maybe you should make sure to jog every day, brush your teeth twice as long, and eat a bit healthier. I know I do to try and offset the habit. plus I have to be in tip top shape for most of what I do.

Smoking all comes down to where you are, who you are and how you choose to do it. Hell, it might be a cop-out as some people say when life gets a bit too stressful, but here I am in japan, right after a huge mess. I'm alive, and I've been working 14 hours a day to restore power to several buildings, and helping people in wreckage. Its hard, I'm stressed, and I'll be damned if you tell me I can't have a cig.

Forum: General Discussion

Last post on thread was by Rob Kosy:

Ah, but I'll bet you were only 6 when you invented this word-fuelled Porsche of a site. in many ways, Chris, I liken you to Matthew Broderick in the movie 'War Games'. Y'know, when he hacks the USA's national defence system and gets to ask Stephen Hawking's 'Speak & Spell' for a game of Thermo Nuclear War? No?
Ah, well, maybe there is too much 80's in this reply, even for you.
But, seriously, Chris, a great achievement, my friend: standards high, membership big and not to mention the atmosphere this place generates.
Here's to 19 more.

Forum: Storyteller's Fire

Last post on thread was by Dcouch87:

I'm sure this is a large response, but I'm new here having just joined. I'd have to agree with the comments I've read however. As you write and go back over things you have previously written, you'll reorganize certain things, edit some things out, and change as you go. Don't worry about surviving chapters early on. Write some, then go back and reread it after a little time. You'll find the appropriate pauses to divide into chapters then. I wrote nearly 15,000 words within 3 chapters. Then when I went back a few days later while typing it from my writing, I realized one chapter could actually be two separate ones.

Forum: Storyteller's Fire

Last post on thread was by Dcouch87:

So I'm writing a historical fiction that takes place during world war 2. It follows the younger of two brothers throughout the war during his search for his older brother that was shot down over Europe. The younger enlists several months after his older brother, just after pearl harbor. He gets sent to the Pacific where he is wounded, then he volunteers for the rangers after he learns of his brother being a pow. My question is, should I add a love interest in the younger brothers life? I have added a way to do so if I choose to, but not sure how to follow. He has just finished his ranger training and is home on leave before being sent to England.

Forum: Announcements

Last post on thread was by Routh:

Stage 1 of this update, deploying SSL has been completed. All pages should show secure in your browsers and Chrome should report that it is using a "modern cipher suite".

I believe I have found all instances of "mixed insecure content" which usually means an image is being loaded with HTTP instead of HTTPS. I may have missed one or two. Please notify me if you find any by replying to this post.

Forum: General Discussion

Last post on thread was by msjhord:

My name is Jennifer and I live in the US. I think I have been in love with words since I was a tot, which is probably why I learned to read by age 4. Somewhere around age 8 or 9, my love of writing was awakened and, thanks to writing-happy public schoolteachers, I got plenty of practice in from then on. Fast forward to adulthood -- marriage, parenthood, child with special needs, family crises, family illness, semi-cross country move, blah blah blah. I haven't gotten as much writing practice going on as I used to. I had a brief spate of it a few years ago, but just wasn't in a good place to receive proper criticism, so I put it on hold. Got into other forms of art like painting, jewelry making, fleshing out my cooking skills. Those are going pretty well, but I still have this story in me that I am dying to tell. And maybe it's cliche, maybe it's not. But I want to tell it and tell it RIGHT! I could use some help. So . . . if you could, lemme know if I'm in the right place (I mean, this isn't a forum dedicated to ONLY one genre, right?) and we'll go forth with what's bouncing around in my head. I warn you in advance, though. I'm a little odd, and a little stubborn haha! thanks for the time!!

Forum: General Discussion

Last post on thread was by Rob Kosy:

Mr Cushions, please receive my cyber hug along with a massive apology for such a delayed reply.
I myself am fine and hoping that you and yours are in a similar fettle.
Time is a meagre mistress at the moment and, would you believe, I have written nothing (accept cheques) since this post; lots of family stuff going on . My mam, though not ill, isn't in the best of conditions physically and requires a lot more help than just twelve months ago. Stick that in the pot with a new management regime at work, allow to simmer for twelve months and out comes the best time/stress sandwich you could ever hope to feast upon. At last count the number of unpaid, extra, hours I have bagged at my place of employ totals three weeks. Blimey, with 21 days of uninterrupted writing I could have finished 'the herrings' and cornered the weird/slightly uncomfortable comedy market.
But enough that, onward and upwards as pompous, upper class knobs like to say.
Many thanks for your response to my "Sir Terry" post. I really was gutted at his passing. But since we have our very own 'Savage Pratchet' here on the den, his style (unwittingly echoed by your talented self) shall live on.
As for the election, you were right, Mr Cushions. the herrings were secreting a few creative juices. However, I have been unable to absorb and act upon them because of said time constraints. having said that David Macaroon has enjoyed a few scribbled notes upon the back of work memos and wage slips. Though I call him David Car Moron, since he obviously a cap driver since we never see him........driving.
Blimey, this is the longest time I've spent on the den all year.
Merry Christmas, savage. I hope you and yours have an excellent one and enjoy a fantastic new year.

Forum: The Editor's Desk

Last post on thread was by only71stitches:

I'm very new to writing and I didn't do so well in English and Grammar back in my school days... LOL

I have a question that I have not found an actual answer for... Everyone seems to have a different opinion on this...

My character's inner thoughts... I write them initialized... I get that... But when it's a question, what the right format?

Example:

How am I alive? he wonders.
How am I alive? He Wonders.
How am I alive, he wonders?

What's the right way to type that?

Forum: Storyteller's Fire

Last post on thread was by hobie roberts:

hey so i got an idea for a short story series and i kinda need help with like cover designs and stuff. my idea is for it to be a zombie book, but like through the zombies eyes, ive been thinking about it for a while and finally got some ideas for the actual plot of it, if any one would like to help with it ill give you my Skype, mostly i really need some one who can draw zombies pretty good for a cover of it, ill be printing it at my sisters work and making like short story's, plus my local book store said if they like it they can start to maby promote it there, ill also have it online to.

Forum: General Discussion

Last post on thread was by Routh:

Found this on Google+ today. Its worth reading and putting into practice.

Forum: General Discussion

Last post on thread was by mcglone:

Because I started off here and have deep respect for this website, I am writing this here.

I have finished my book (finally) but I need an outside view to check if everything is up to scratch. This only just dawned on me when I set my book up on Amazon as a pre-order title.

So, if anyone is willing to help I'd be greatful and I will even give you a complimentary copy of the the final book!

I hope you guys don't mind me posting this here.

Forum: The Editor's Desk

Last post on thread was by mcglone:

Because I started off here and have deep respect for this website, I am writing this here.

I have finished my book (finally) but I need an outside view to check if everything is up to scratch. This only just dawned on me when I set my book up on Amazon as a pre-order title.

So, if anyone is willing to help I'd be greatful and I will even give you a complimentary copy of the the final book!

I hope you guys don't mind me posting this here.

Forum: The Editor's Desk

Last post on thread was by Routh:

Heads up for those of you publishing to Amazon. Amazon is looking to change their pay model so you only get paid for pages read.

http://www.telegraph.co.uk/technology...-read.html

Forum: The Editor's Desk

Last post on thread was by LawMatheson:

(DOSCO Spoiler Warning) I have been doing my research, it doesn't seem like there is much venue for GOOD gay literature (other than whiny 'coming out' stories from New York Times Best Sellers, where that is the ONLY focus of the novel), so I have been talking to some friends (other gay writers) from Brazil and Spain, both friends of mine. Together, we are thinking of banding together, gathering our friends/family/followers into one web site, offering things the other gay publishing house websites don't offer (I drew up a 30 page business proposal yesterday, so I have the research), market in three languages, sell in three countries (and help one another out shipping the others books when it is cheaper for them), and use the website as a platform to blast our books. We could then branch out to other gay writers from around the world, and publish for them if they are in a 'closed' country and they can't.

Does anyone have any advice on this? This is a large dream of mine, one I am just discovering, but one that is coming together. Advice and criticism is always helpful (just know that 'impossible' is my fuel).

I'm a dreamer; Even if I die with unfulfilled dreams, I will know I have done everything I could to chase after them; Rather than live 'comfortably' suppressing those aspirations.

Forum: Storyteller's Fire

Last post on thread was by Vollkrasser:

Hi,

I made a script/plot for new cases in the traditional style of Sir Arthur Conan Doyle"™s stories of Sherlock Holmes and Dr. Watson. That script is the basis for a non-commercial online adventure game version.

The first previews of the game are"¦

...here in video https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=LGY4thv8wG0

...here pics with the final lightning, scroll down in the forum, the last post on page 1 forum

...here is the first scene playable online (graphics there are just placeholdeers and will be replaced):
http://textadventures.co.uk/games/vie...n-of-sheba

The game ought to be in British English, best would be the old Victorian style of Sir Arthur Conan Doyle. I"™m not a native English speaker, and it would be a sacrilege to have even the slightest foreign accent for this. That would be German in my case, which is reserved for the villains already ;-)

So I"™m looking for a writer, who would like to take part in this project for free as I also do.
The workflow would be that he/she starts from my bad English script and writes a nice round story out of it that can then be the novel part of the adventure. Think of it as a bit like Dr. Watson did with the bare facts of Holmes: he made entertaining and exciting stories out of it. It would be similar with our cooperation for the adventure.

Best would be if the writer speaks a bit german, but it"™s not a must.
The final game will be free and online playable by everybody even without registration on the above platform.

The game is afoot!

If youre interested, just contact me via e-mail, which is described in 2 parts (to avoid-auto spam crawlers):
the first part is
reinarassa
the second part is
@googlemail.com
combine the two and you have the valid e-mail.

Best regards from germany/Bavaria!

Vollkrasser